All Comments on 'Pantomime Dwarf Pt. 01'

This a fine intro to what I hope will keep up the initial intrigue. The two main characters are well established; Alan the dwarf is appealing. The sex scene was believable and arousing. I didn't rate this 100 as there seemed a distance in the telling of the tale. I would also prefer to "see" the negative characters (a rabid fem. or two) vs. merely being "told" about them. Look forward to more (rehearsals, performance, etc.)

The final part (06) of Pantomime Dwarf has just been submitted, ending the story. This last part is largely as written in 2004 with a minor tweak to the ending, but the whole work was written 9 years ago.

I have decided not to rewrite the whole but leave it as it was, flaws and all.

Jeanne