All Comments on 'Panty Game'

Great story.

That was very nicely built up and very hot!

Thank you!

A very arousing story. All bases were covered, The lead up to the climax was awesome as each character entered into their roles. It was such a subtle beginning that snowballed over and over again. Delightful ending...Job well done

Will there bet a second chapter now that everyone is involved?

Great story, the buildup was great and the end was perfect. But you could use a proof reader to get that star rating up! I’m available: proofreader35@gmail.com

Sorry. So very sorry. I gave up at page four, because I couldn't take it any more.

Commas. Periods. Punctuation. It's a thing.

I know, people below 30 don't really see the need, but for old farts like myself a text like this becomes torture.

The story line is fine, the writing is quite good, I see your talent.

But still...

"Let's eat grandma!" (Commas can save lives.)

Loved reading this story! So very sexy, erotic, stimulating. Thank you so much for your sexy creativity. :)

Alex

I liked the premise and promise of this story, but you need to use punctuation. I just couldn't read this. I write stories here, and I know I'm not perfect, but this was just impossible to read. Sorry.

Great premise and I quite enjoyed the story. I have to agree with a couple of the other comments on here about the punctuation but that comes with experience. Can I suggest using one of the editing providers on Literotica? That's how I started, and it made a massive difference to my writing. Also, Grammarly is a free editing software that I would highly recommend. Keep going with it, love the idea.

Atrocious grammer, punctuation, and syntax. Go back to 5th grade english class.

I enjoyed the story until near the end where it got kind of goofy with the whole family fucking each other. Went from a five to four stars. If Dad had such a huge dick, why did Mom go hunting her son's smaller dick, besides the thrill of incest? A lot of holes in the story, no pun intended, like a 19 year old girl not being on birth control pills among other things. Anyway, it got the juices flowing with all the trading and jacking with panties in the first part of the story.

I did enjoy the story for the most part, except one big problem. For a story that is so panty focussed (yay) there was not one instance of describing the underwear being worn/used as anything more than "panties" or "tiny panties" there are tons of different styles and materials available to women it wouldve been great for some more details.