All Comments on 'Paradise Island Pt. 01'

Really good story, can't wait for more! There were a couple mistakes but they only slightly detracted from it

Please continue this story!

Another good story. My only gripe was if the pool heals all injuries and his sight why did it not restore his foreskin? A circumcision is still an injury.

It's very creative and hot, thanks for sharing.

Literotica has a volunteer editor program - I edit for them - and your work would be easy to edit quickly. Many readers have no issue with the small mistakes, others find them distracting. You switch perspective a few times - it's as though you started the story in the first person and then went back and changed it to third person and you missed a few first person pronouns. Also, "deftly afraid" - not the correct idiom.

Great Story. 5/5

This is an absolutely fantastic beginning! I can't wait to read more of what's to come.

AWESOME first chapter!!!

“The women were all transfixed on this for 2 reasons: they had never seen a circumcised penis before, and it looked almost 10" long.”

Serious faux pas here. If the water cured his eyes and removed a scar from his hand, his penis would have been restored as well……..

MORE please sir/ madame..!