All Comments on 'Parental Break-Up Ch. 01'

A very quick start but very nice, I do hope you continue.

Pretty hot - make sure you capture the complexities of what they're doing and not just make it a series of sex scenes. The possibilities are endless... 5*

Good start, begging for a conclusion

The initial story line is fine. I'm just concerned that this story will end up like most of the others that this author wrote - meaning is will most likely go unfinished.

Maybe once he and Mom are solid and she is Pregnant. She can divorce the Father. stick him with child support.

please continue. i like it so far.

****Hot and sexy read. Thanks for sharing.

Need part 2.. and soon

Load this into a text reader and unless you edit the story, this is what this sentence sounds like. "oh yes.....yes.....fuck me....make me... your slut....I...want...you...to...own....me" Text Reader: "oh yes dot dot dot dot yes dot dot dot dot fuck me dot dot dot dot make me dot dot your slut dot dot dot dot I dot dot dot want dot dot dot you dot dot dot to dot dot dot own dot dot dot dot me" Other wise it would have been a good story and earned 5 stars! For the dot dot dot dot story? 1 fucking dot dot dot dot star!

Title of story title is confusing in regard to story context.

Maybe, a slow starter.