All Comments on 'Party Play'

...but your writing skills need some work. It's very distracting to have to navigate around the wreckage of the language!

I agree. The awful writing is really distracting from what may be a good story.

Learn the difference between loose and lose. Two different words.

if something as petty as the difference between lose and loose can turn you off to a story that hot, you may have a little loosening up to do yourself...it certainly got ME hard.