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All Comments on 'Pasiphae's Daughters Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Hands down, the worst writing skills I've ever read, erotic or generic stories all included. If English is not the author's native language, IT SHOWS.

I suffered thorough the first long passage, but no longer could force myself to endure the punishment of the rest.

Don't publish anything again unless you ask a skilled, native English-speaking editor to fix your terrible writing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

I liked the story, however from the beginning I always wanted to know if Victor will end up playing with Helen, the ending is like there is still part two coming.

fatherfigure62fatherfigure62almost 3 years ago

Love your story, can't wait for part 2.

unclebeardyunclebeardyalmost 3 years ago

I couldn't finish it - you say you are from the UK: you definitely need an editor, but first work on your story writing skills

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Hi, I am Valeria Delecta. Born in UK in eighties and traveling all over the world since childhood, I may never attached to places or people, but adored their stories and especially the forbidden ones; those containing close contact with paranormal and strange situations. The w...