All Comments on 'Passing the Torch'

Was an OK story. You really need an editor to help you.

I think you'll find Janet was a fiancée not a fiancé. Fiancé is male. Fiancée is female.

Ludicrous story and full of errors. Get an editor.

Yeah... obviously missing word messing up the flow already on the second sentence? Get the feeling no one on here ever does even a quick read through before posting... come on...

You really need an editor! The immediate turnabout by the fiance made no sense at all............ 3***

Don't listen to the person who said you need an editor. You need a ghost writer. Editing would be too much work, even if you paid the going rate. You write like you have ADHD and can't help wandering off topic in the middle of almost every sentence, just to wander back later, before you put down a period.

I have a feeling the meandering would settle down if you just would take the time to read your own writing. I don't blame you though if you just can't stomach that task. I know I couldn't, but if you don't want to do the work necessary to write something that actually makes sense, then you shouldn't take that laziness out on unsuspecting readers. That's just rude.

HOT! 25 Stars, lol

Victoria, Janet and Catherine weren’t really identified till well into your story. Off track a bit and too quick of a conversion of Janet

MarshalMarmont1815

Not my favorite premise (I'm a big fan of sweet, saccharine sibcest) but a very hot story. Maybe a little disjointed in places, but still very enjoyable. 5*

Now, to another commenter:

Good God cageysea9725...You bitch about hate mail in your bio, and yet...I've read your comments, and they're all like this one. You're one of the biggest assholes on this site who is also capable of stringing a coherent sentence together! I enjoyed "Broken" and "Full Moon Over Tulsa" and I was really looking forward to reading the conclusion of "Broken" before you took it down (though I of course still have it, because I always download stories I like, just in case the site disappears, or something), but it's revealing to learn that you're just as much of a dick as the father in that story. (Can't remember his name right now, haven't read the story in a bit) No wonder you were clearly planning to have the father cuck his son with his daughter(s). Thank God you decided to be a vile, hypocritical coward, and write nasty comments instead of ruining that rather lovely (though certainly not perfect) story. I hope you find some happiness somehow in your life. How the... adequately capable...have fallen.