All Comments on 'Past, Present and Future Ch. 06'

Another great chapter!

5

Penny shines!

Patination is a good thing.

Exquisite as usual. This story put a ray of sunshine into a gray, snowy November Ohio Sunday morning. Easy 5 stars. More, please.

Damn! Another ecstatic idyll in the maelstrom that is today's world. Each chapter, so blissfully bucolic, quietly enrapturing. Hoping there's an epic number of instalments to this delightful tale.

Excellent continuation of an excellent story.

I look forward to how he chooses, and how Stephanie sees that process and choice....

You're a good writer. Please keep going!

Sincerely,

Cuckold Paul

This is such a great and wonderful story. Love your characters and how you describe their thoughts and emotions. Such well developed story telling and plot development. Thanks for your time and efforts in writing these chapters and so looking forward to many many more tales of their fun and entertaining adventures. You do a great job. Cheers

Great writing and a great story; when's Ch 07 due?

You are a very gifted writer. Your narrative voice is clear, distinct and delightful. Your tale is original and compelling. I’ve been binge reading it.

Yet, as I read my “writing teacher” senses keep tingling. I spent decades teaching composition at the secondary and university level. When Spider-Man’s “Spidey sense” goes off, he’s in imminent danger. When my senses go off it means I’ve run across an impediment to story development: FILLER.

Why is this gifted writer constantly recapping what has already been described - in some cases multiple time in multiple chapters?

Brevity is the sole of wit. It’s as if you were struggling to fill a minimum quota of three pages. This filler was probably just mildly obstructive for most readers but I found it quite irritating!

Can you, please, just tell the story?

Not a fan of the flashbacks.

But the rest is absolutely inspired, loving it !

Also not a fan of the constant recaps. I think you meant to make every chapter stand alone, but it's incredibly annoying to your true fans! Add in the excessive "teasers" at each chapter ending (which to be fair are easy enough to skip,) and I am questioning whether it's worth continuing. But I always have come back, so far, so it's okay - I just really wish you would get with the program! 3*