All Comments on 'Path of the Necromancer Ch. 03'

Was waiting eagerly for the story to continue. I really hope you have a plan for both the stories and you won't leave them unfinished.

Amazing storyline in both of 'em.

usually i don't leave any comment partly because i don't like typing, partly because of poor stories and so on ... . i don't know how to give you any good advise because you are too good a writer, but there is one thing i want to say, if you write few series and sharpen your techniques you could be one of the greats. thank you for such a delightful experience please continue writing .

more please more. well worth the read.

Glad to see the third of the series up, and equally as good as the last two (actually, slightly better). I hope to see much more of your work in the coming months!

the minimal grammar and spelling errors could have been 10x worse for them to have impacted the strength of this story...

to use your own world, this story has a shield made out of the very fibers of the spirit world... grammar and spelling errors be damned!

The word play aside, after reading this chapter, I can only say the feeling of euphoria I am feeling is on par with a full day+night of hardcore loving, as well as getting high as a kite and sleeping deeply for two days, even both combined, sleep sex! yumm!

An epic chapter, I eagerly await the next chapter, you are an epic author, one for the history books especially in the years I have lurked here on LR

Love this story cant wait for more just greatness in a chapter this story is plus the length of each chapter awesome!!!!

Just one comment. It's getting kind of confusing to remember all of Ian's lovers. I recommend you keeping it mainly at Ember and then some other girls.

In a week would be fine

Another great chapter!!

BOOYAH!

NEW CHAPTER FTW!

*ahem*

Seriously, though, new chapter! And 9 pages too!

This was a great read....keep em coming

Great Chapter, you could make it even more epic, without stretching the plot, great work, can't wait for the next one.

I mean, you're working on TWO epic stories at the same time AND they're BOTH awesome!! (happy dance!!!)

I have a small request..If it is possible for you to add a simple character guide.Something simple like name/ appearance/ supernatural nature.I love the story and I like seeing necromancers being cast in a more positive light.But as your story expands I have found it neccesary to reread previous chapters to keep track of the different expanding storylines and character list. I mean Ian has an impressive list of lovers but an even bigger list of potential lovers...at last count. His lovers include Val (human) /Ember (succubus)/ Eris (lich)/ Dani ( former 9th order assasin) and his potential lovers include a chinese banshee/ werewolf / sister biker chicks/ Ashley& Lisa / and a possible european necromancer and military witch...for a total of 4 current lovers and 8 potential lovers not including his increasing list of enemies...so just a little assistance. In keeping order of this awesome. World you have created....I apologize for asking more from you..but I feel this would be very beneficial ..continue the great work...thank you

I can't wait for the next chapter! I haven't been this excited about a story since EvilAlpaca's last one.

You know, I was thinking the exact same thing earlier. Another nice thing would be a short summary (2 paragraphs, tops) of what happened in the last chapter, or at least the most important parts. Of the two ideas, however, the character guide would be more appreciated by far.

Don't take this the wrong way, PLEASE, but your story is getting a little bit... complex, for it's first few chapters. (Complex in a good way -- I like an engaging story), but it's also infrequent in posting, so some of the details fade from our minds by the time the next chapter rolls around. (Although I do understand why it's taking so long; 9 pages on Lit. is deceptive, because 9 pages on Lit. could easily be as much as 40 pages in OpenOffice/Microsoft Word. And 40 pages is NOT easy to write quickly.)

And now for something relating to the actual content of the story:

So.... the necromancers from highborn families are still alive, eh? There's gonna be one helluva shitstorm when they found out that Ian made a lich. (I'm guessing here, given what Ember just finished telling him about the power he wields.)

I think the characters are great and I'm loving where the plot is taking us. On days when these stories appear, I know I'm going to lose about an hour of my work day (though this one took me longer). :)

Thank you and keep it up!

I'm guessing that Ian is stronger than the highborn necromancers, having a talent that is seen only once in several thousand years. He's bound to shake things up for them!

You really write some of the best stuff in here. Keep'em coming. Can't wait

You've got a very good premise, a well thought-out magic system, and a cool main character. They story has a lot of personality and the humor really shows through. I'll definitely be following this for some time.

That said, here's the problem: WAY too many viewpoint characters. Not only are you introducing a new character almost every page (and sometimes more), but you're spending time inside all their heads, often jumping between perspectives in the same scene. It's distracting, forcing the reader to pause and reorient every time you start on yet another person's thoughts, and making it that much harder to keep track of your exponentially growing cast. You don't need to devote time to detailing what each person thinks of every situation - it's just not that important. You've made me care and empathize with Ian and his group, so it feels very odd and annoying when you hop into the head of someone I hardly know. I highly recommend you tone it back before the scenes become downright schizophrenic. The narrative would be much stronger and stable for the effort.

Highly interesting story, classic yet unique uses of some of the more common and not so common fantasy mage tersm/variations. Quite interested to see where the tale will take our young hero/hodlum as he were heh. Looking forward to the next installment and wondering when we'll see a Chronomancer (time mage) and how the author will allow the minipulation of spirits to affect the manipulation of time. (I honestly just want to see what the authors uptake on a time mage would be, kinda hoping they exist in his world and we'll meet one.)

On a side note, I have recently started work on my own story line and had named the main character Ian also.... the popularity that this story seems to have has me thinking about chainging my characters name just to keep myself from being called a ripoff artist of a popular series lol.

Look forward to the next chapter whenever it comes out. Thanks IF for such an interesting story line and character to follow (a nice take on the classic demented necro... he's still demented... just nice guy demented love it lol).

Amazing story, love the character development and the unknown direction Ian's powers could take! Keep writing!

I love the story you have so far. Surprisingly, the biggest reason why I'm reading this is for the plot, not sex!

A small error (?) I noticed, nothing big though:

On page 5:

"Nevertheless, she wasn't one to mope around all day and hitting her wall against a wall trying to find out more about the 9th Order was what that equated to."

Did you mean "hitting her head against a wall?"

I know everyone has their own ideas of how this story should progress, but I hope that you will write the story as you have been. To change anything now would through the entire story off. I definitely have no problem following everything that's going on, but that's just me. Can't wait for the next installment!!

Thank for the story. An amazing premise and story flow. Great characters and scene situations. I get caught up in the emotions. Looking forward to the future chapters.

I never thought I'd find such a fitting example of the 'grey knight'. I love Ian for doing what's necessary while helping everyone he can. I like him even more than Michael, because he is not quite as dark, but that is just personal tendencies on my part. I like both of them.

You write some damn good stuff!

more more more more more more more more more more more more more more...................... pretty plz.

10/10!

There was a phrase I really liked back near page 4. It was really great. I think. Loved it!

Listen to the comment five below this one and continue writing your greatness as is.

Awesome story about necromancers. Its about time someone brought them into new light. Before,it was just old guys with skeleton warriors and some occassional zombies. Who knew that they have so much potential! More power man! Keep at it!

This is turning out to be one of the best stories. I've really enjoyed the depth of the story along with the characters. I've seen other people commenting about how you should do this or that. In my opionion, it's your story and I have no problem with different chars or perspectives. I'm sure some of us have read Robert Jordan's or George R.R. Martin books that are fully loaded with different chars, perspectives and plots. Anyway, I'm having fun reading this the way you have it.

Waiting for the next chapter to come out is one of the things that keeps me going. If you were to stop now, I don't know what I'd do. Your creativity and storytelling is that of a writing god. I'm addicted.

Easily my favourite story on literotica keep up the good work.

It's that good

Absolutely amazing. Easily has the potential to become the best story on the site. Keep it up!

How bout a cast list to cut down on confusion,for Terra as well???

One of the best stories I've ever come across on this site! Keep up the good work :D

The editing could be better, though. The story's good enough to keep up with in spite of it, but you could use a more thorough proofreading for grammar and clarity.

This and Terra are two of my top five favorite stories on literotica. Since Ian seems to be interested in making friends/alliances I hope some of his females might make other "love" interests instead of just being a harem for him. Maybe Mei or Rose/Eve could end up with Bobby creating a different type of connection for Ian. Rachel and an upcoming leader in the Church (not the 9th circle) a move towards reform.

Since Scraps has his own personality it might be humorous if he has a weakness for furry baby animals, and Ian gets injured because Scraps saves the animal instead of protecting Ian. Scraps could secretly keep all the little furry animals he rescues until some humorous event.

Hi there!

You continue to deliver solidly. While I am still afraid this may turn into a Über-Harem story your prose is still nice and the story developing fine.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

love it, well written.

Must be other jealous writers, because as stated in several other comments the ONLY thing wrong with this story are the very very few typos/grammer/spelling mistakes. The story is awesome. IMO best on the site already.

Earned it. And of course this is going to be an Uber Harem, what's wrong with that?

beutifully written with a deranged mind and given love from a cold and possesive heart the fact that there is only one man binds them togeather like a carbon fiber web set in concrete love this stuff

beautiful

This has to be the best Science Fiction story on Lit. Someone commented on chapter 2 that they were pissed that POTN beat STTS for the number one story of all time. I agree with the commenter below that the only reason this story is not a 5 is because of jealous fans.

between their appartment and at least one of the others or they are gonna run out bed space. Then install a bed twice as big as Ember wants so that they have room to grow :)

Really enjoying the series and i can't wait for more!

Keep it coming. I love the fight scenes

three chapters count as a series right?

anyway you got the competition beat by far so please keep it up! :)

I really enjoy reading this story! It has got to be the most intriguing story I've read online ever! Keep up the good work man!

I don't comment very often, but the two series you have going on here are absolutely fucking amazing! please keep up this awesome work!

Your a very good writer, Maybe even professional, or at least you should be.

great stuff! super cool universe. my only problem is that it's hard to keep track of who is who (just a side effect of reading every piece when it comes out instead of all at once).

You are amazing. I'm trying to think of something to say that you possibly don't know and I honestly can't think of anything. This story is incredible and I can't wait to read more of it.

The plot is superb, and the writing is excellent. Those two things are the most important parts of any story to me.

I highly look forward to the next chapter.

I do hope you plan to make writing a profession. With a little slower pacing and a bit more complexities into the plot, these stories would be novels sitting on bestseller lists.

Absolutely amazing....what else can I say other than I can't wait for Chapter 4 to be released!

Love the story and can't wait for more. Awesome complexity to your world and looking forward to see where you take it. Please keep writing!

Thank you for sharing your talent. I enjoy the way you bring your characters to life (pardon the pun) and the complexity of the world you are developing. I can't wait to read more and in the meantime will try your other stories.

Totally agree with you, a character guide would be great, there are so many characters in this awesome story, so it kinda get hard to follow, for example, the description of sarah (at lest what I remember) just say she's blond, cute and 21 years old, not how her body,hair or eyes are. I dont want to sound like an whiny bitch, but a guide, especially of lovers and potential lovers, would do wonders for me and how I imagine the story. And just one more thing, is just me or does somebody else imagine rachel like hermione from Harry Potter?

... not would of. Makes no sense. Look it up. We should bring back spelling and grammar back to elementary or what used to be called grammar school. It amazes me to what an extent people will defend grammatical mistakes with "it's correct because that's how we speak".

Excellent story!

And with all the people added on the stories, each one with their peculiar feautures, there is a lot of futher potentiality on this story.

Each time I read your stories I dread at the thought of scrolling to the bottom of the page. Because I really wish this story never ends.

A great story, I can not wait for the next chapter in the series!!!!

whens the next one...????? i cant wait... pleaseeee... can you upload it asap?????

Amazingly well written. The series depicted necromancers in a very different and interesting manner.

Would request you to kindly continue with the series.

Thanks again for sharing.

What a fantastic story and concept! I love the setting, the gritty characters and the responsive, natural feel of magic you've given to the story. Not another knock off of a role playing game system with points and levels and shit. If you took out the sex scenes I'd still read it. Thumbs up!

This story has got so, so much potential. You are an amazing writer, Sir.

Really great story! Been reading this on the Android app, but fired up the laptop just to be able to vote and comment. Really hope the updated keep coming (and cumming ;-)

Love this series. Can't wait to read the next.

Ohhh.........

going through....

Intrepid...Fate...

withdrawal....

*wheeze*

*death rattle*

*thud*

It's times like these where i wish i could erase my memories so i could re-read the posted series and enjoy them again :P

withdraw is a B&#$H... longest break between both stories, Im even checking twice daily now... even checking biography page as well...

no other story can claim that in such a short time (for me at least)

getting good really liking it so far. plus it looks like you do big updates instead of 2 or 3 pages after the initial build up. It has the perfect balance. a lot of good story with a bit of sex instead of the usual sex with a bit of story to string it all together. keep it coming i'll check again in a few months.

Very well thought out and detailed. can't wait for chapter 4.

Just started today with the first chapter and couldn't let go until I finished it all. Definitely one of the best stories on here.

Please do not stop this series in the middle like so many do.

When are you going to update? Very good

This has got to be the best series i have ever read on here! Please don't stop midway through and keep going! Support from a reader!!

Longest Break Ever........ Man Post the next chapter fast in either series..........

It is taking a long time..... Just post it now..... Can't wait ....

Caught a couple lines i must have skimmed over the first two read throughs. ^.^ Wonder how well compulsions work on demons.

GO ORGIES!! GO LESBIANS!! GO HAREMS!!!!

Stop telling IntrepidFate to hurry up. The stories are going to be released once he's finished, and complaining about how long it takes isn't helping. Furthermore, he's doing this purely because he wants to, which means you don't have ANY say in when he releases things.

To sum it up? Stop complaining about how long it takes for IntrepidFate to release a novel. Its not helping him whatsoever and may actually annoy him (I certainly would be annoyed)>

I love both of your stories. easily among the best on this site IMHO. Keep up the good work. Have you ever considered getting published? I have read paper books that are not as interesting or written as well.

must have moar...

I don't know what to say about the break, the long time hopefully means that it's a long chapter... or you could have abandoned the series. I love your work though! It's terrific!

great writing,,,i really liked your story so far....lots of sex and a plausible story line for anyone to follow...you are an excellent writer,,i really need to read more of your ,,,,STUFF!!

I picked this story at random and I'm glad I did. It is truly an amazingly entertaining read so far & I'm looking forward to what's up next for everyone.

Here's hoping it's the 'long chapter' choice, and not the 'abandoned' choice.

I have several series which seem to have been abandoned, and they're all excellent.

Only one, however, even comes close to this, and I REALLY don't want to see this one go away.

page 2:

"She gritted her teeth in annoyance when she realized a small part of her relished the fact that she had made him proud of her."

D'AAAAWWWWW....

She's falling for him in a way that ISN'T purely sexual!

:3

How that for unusual eh? A succubus who isn't just a sex-hungry demon?

*wakes up*

*goes to I_F's stories page*

'...dammit.'

Really good story. Waiting for the next chapter.

logged on again as i have for the last several weeks hoping for another chaptor and is it there this time.......sadly no. please for the sake of our sanity let it be that you are working on a longer chapter that will melt our feeble mortal brains and that you havent abandoned us or this story.

Very good story...nice changes of pace between storyline & "action".

Seriously can't wait for the next chapter - the sooner the better!

This is a wonderful story. Lots of fun to read, and I can hardly wait for more!!

i have been reading fromthe begining when you published the first one, i can hardly wait to read the next chapter. such a great story, i love it

amazing!!!!!!! well written and captivating

Please don't stop writing! When my girlfriend reads this story she gets so horny she just pounces on me. Its the same way for me with this story it's just that freaking good of a story. For the love of God don't stop writing! Send the next chapter out soon. We are begging you to continue the story.

Sincerely your fans Ray and Emily.

I just found this story today and was hooked. Next chapter please! :D

cant wait for the next chapter :)