All Comments on 'Payback Ch. 01'

please get someone to edit this; your verb tenses are all over the place, and the flow within phrases is a bit scattershot. I like the story and where it's going, you just need to tighten up the technical aspects.

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Where is Ch 2?. Thanks for sharing.

Grow the fuck up!