All Comments on 'Payment in Kind Ch. 02'

Wow. You are a fantastic story teller and writer

A twisted tale, totally "enwrapturing."

Brilliant story. Just like your last.

As good as Lit gets, on every level. Hot, romantic, tender, did I mention hot?

Very well written

Excellent

There aren't enough stars so, I could only give you five. Wonderfully done sequel. Thanks for writing it and sharing it.

Deserves more than five stars!

One of the best written stories on this site. Truly got me thinking a different way about topics touched on in this story. It is quite the something else. Though provoking about love, sex, relationships, submission, desires, among many others.

Thank you. It was excellent. I mean the story, the writing, the sex, all of it. I have been looking for a good story to read for a while and this was perfect. I could go on and on, you know us writers. Again, thank you.

Bravo!! I'm sure this took a long time to write. Very enjoyable. The geography is a bit off regarding the time and distance between E TX towns, but not alarmingly so. I grew up in Kilgore, about 20 miles from Henderson..

Great story. Loved the happy endings in both parts 1 and 2.

The best sequel ever! If the hooks were left in the first story deliberately then it was genius. If not then great creativity. Brilliant either way.

Thank you.

Damn, well done indeed. Thank you!

Great and quite unexpected plot. Very well written.

As other commentators have said, the endings of both chapters are great especially given the 'heavy' bits in the middle. Great read.

Look forward to more from this author.

They had to be good to read right through. Nice writing style & great imagination.

Great story. Even better than the previous chapter.

Well, I would have to say on a site which I consider essentially a sex site, your scripts Payment in Kind 1 & 2 are a breath of fresh air. Both are well planned scripts, erotic and extremely well written. While I might migrate to a much more graphic story, I was absolutely enthralled by your script. I make a distinction between your scripts and other stories because that is exactly what it is. I could see your scripts evolve as a highly successful erotic emotional drama screenplay. And who would not be enthralled in something like that. The story line, the painful emotional reality of real-life circumstances, balanced with personal struggles and demons, heroes, cautionary love and fetish. I love it and I do not believe there is a better written piece on this site. I am not critical of very slight typos or inconsistencies because the scripts and characters are so strong. Thank you for your time and efforts writing a wonder couple of pieces.

I think you wrote friend bacon instead of fried. Also, “clips” link individual rounds together. Magazines are what you load and or store your rounds in, and Insert into a pistol. Other than that though, absolutely fantastic writing and storytelling. Great characters. I really got into them. The sex was a fun ride too. Super fine work all around.

Very well written and multi dimensional story!