All Comments on 'Penny Wilson Learns to Tease'

I saw myself through the entire story. Wish I had such a guy to accompany me to the play and "enjoy" him as much as she did......great

If you cannot spell Hi, why should anyone read any further?

...but you need an editor,

Great job of a smooth transition from casual lunch to sex in the evening. Very rare that is pulled off gracefully.

Alwaystaboo

The only reason I kept reading is because I couldn't find another that wasn't written in first person.

I don't mean to be harsh but did you even read it before you submitted it? So many (many, many, many, many) grammatical errors & misspellings. Many places there are letters left out (ex: of instead of off) or you used he instead of her.

Having to figure out what you're trying to say takes us out of the moment & ruins it.

Decent concept though.

Such an promising storyline, but the awful writing killed whatever interest the story had.