All Comments on 'Penny's Lesbian Awakening'

an imagination. Poorly written, ungrammatical, and full of every cliché going.

I hope you use an editor,everyone needs one. Your imagination is on par with a lot of the authors on here. The story may have gone a little fast, but fantasies are like that.

The previous comments by Kaf,who only wrote one story a long tome ago, are a little harsh and not too accurate. Don't take his criticism too seriously.

You did good, keep up the good works.

not a bad start. keep it up.

You had a lot of characters which made it confusing. Character definition was reasonable but again because rushed detracted from your story. If you had left us with the idea that this was an elaborate party for Bisexual women and concentrated on Suki only letting us know that the story would be continued. Take more care with the grammar otherwise, I like the way your story may progress.

I am sorry but this story was not that good

I loved your story, it turned me on

Not to be unkind, but I stopped reading by paragraph four. Your concept is sound, but your use of punctuation - more a lack thereof - is enough to make many readers who know better turn away. As noted, you need an editor. Don't give up, you'll improve.

I totally imagine the entire party and by the end it got me off big time. Loved the action and wish I could have been there!

Oh to have been on the security cameras during THAT party!

You just need some editing. This story could've been longer instead of cramming all of THAT into this short story. I couldn't really get into it. Some of the scenes remind me more of what a man does than a woman.

I love lesbian stories & this is one of the best I have read, On xhamster , I many lesbian vids and stories available. I'm known as Fran969 but also known as Panty man.

There are some really raunchy bits her, but for a lesbian virgin to fist another girl during her first experience of lesbian love is a little incredible. But I must say, I don't know Sydney pool parties could be so much fun. K xx