by PlainJane12
I really like this story and rated it five stars, the one bit I found slightly offputting was the bit where it said - to stretch out that cavern that just couldn't completely close. I think most girls would be insulted if you referred to their vaginas as caverns. It just doesn't conjure up a nice image to me. Saying that I really like the story and the way its developed and I like the concept. The only reason I've commented is because you can obviously write a great story and I hope you continue to write and part of that is receiving criticism so that you get better and better. Very good though.
Nicely done, good dialogue, plausible premise. Looking forward to next chapter.
loved it please write more.. I just can't wait to know what happens next!