All Comments on 'Perfection Ch. 04'

Emily dated Jared for 3 months but in Ch 1 she had not had a first kiss????

Then after 1 day, Tristan is fingerbanging her to orgasm???

Yeah, you might want to plan out your story a little more

When u read someone critizing their writing, it always hiding behind anonymous? I call them A CHICKENSHIT LITTLE PUSSY !!!!!

Haha, thanks Hrags :)

Great story. I could never criticize because I cannot write stories. So who am I to judge,lol. Will be waiting for more chapters. Hope u finish it asap. Will be looking for it. Thanks, Grayson

Okay, I detected a HUGE continuity error here. In Chapter One, Emily tells Tristan that she's never dated or kissed anybody before. Now all of a sudden, we have an ex boyfriend who is the son of the police chief and he tried to date rape her? 🤔 COME ON DUDE!!!! Get your fucking story straight!!! 3/5 and falling fast. SMH