by kickinasphault
You've turned what could be very average into something special. I look forward to reading how Mary and D's relationship continues.
Didn't like it. It could have been better if it were a longer story. The words ' I love you ' seem too abrupt
Well this is the first story here on Lit that I have seen from this author and really liked it. I do believe this is a story that deserves more chapters and a chance to become a more in depth love story. Author seems to have a talent and I for one would enjoy reading more of this story. Well done 5 stars
I liked the premise of the story but you rushed it too much. Next time start with him getting to know her then sex then love. It's all jumbled up in on way to short story.