All Comments on 'Peter Ch. 03'

Dear Author,

I doubt you will ever read this, but I will leave it anyway.

This is only my third reading of your work but I have looked at your Bio.

By the number of stories I would thing you would have plenty of feedback left and might have read some and learned a bit from it.

You really should read the feedback.

Your readers are trying to help you to be a better author for the most part.

I can only guess that you do not edit your work as there are a lot of amateur mistakes within your writings.

This last chapter of Peter is so rushed !

Also you have taken to repeating previous statements almost word for word.

Obviously you enjoy writing.

But maybe you should do more reading of other peoples writing .

You have a lot to learn about writing.

Even reading your own work would teach you a bit.

But read slow, listen to what you are trying to say.

You really would benefit from finding an editor / proofreader .

If you do that, don't take their suggestions as if they are trying to run you down.

Most editors and or proofreaders are doing so to try to help the author be better.

They can greatly help.