All Comments on 'Pharr Flung (Well Hung) Tours'

But you got lost in too many words and in the effort to be funny. Yes, there's funny in there. And a couple of clever lines. But it was simply too long to be entertaining. Not enough funny or clever parts.

Your story seems very interesting, but it got lost in all those verbose lines... It was funny and I love puns, but you mix humor with "high English" and that is too pedantic at times.

I don't really giving negative reviews, but here I felt the need, because I believe in your story telling, however ...

Keep trying, please don't stop, your idea is great...

Leave the thesaurus at home next time. It reads like word salad.

Good story, nothing wrong with it that a bit of editing wouldn't sort out - making it clearer who's speaking, which person is being got rid of, etc. Could even flesh out the different sections a bit more.

Nothing wrong with a large vocabulary, either - suspect certain Anon commenters see too much of themselves in Mr Alex!

I thought that you built the story carefully and kept my attention with Your attention to details that I enjoy. Perhaps it's because I am a bit older (make that a Lot of a bit) and was looking for a good story, and maybe read somewhat better. Anyway I loved the humour and the timing. Thanks again!

Your two funniest jokes are..."boots not matching her outfit"

and "autumnal" beer.

The power of Contrast! :+))

Your ever-changing writing styles?

Hmmm...I stayed with them...so they're not a DealBreaker? :+))

In all the Flowery Stuff...I kept hoping for at least an occasional

"reality peek-a-boo" line...like your two best jokes.

Summing Up?

My main desire is for us to do naked read-alouds of this with each other.

We could add a LOT of funny lines!

Do you get to Music City? :+)))