All Comments on 'Playing It Safe'

not sure what this is even about. The story jumps all over the place. Not sure it is worth struggling through.

It was difficult to get involved in this story; even though it was relatively well written, I'm damned if I know what itwas about, it seemed to start in the middle and then veered off in several tangents. A confusing and not satisfying read at all, perhaps the author needs to think about whether this is the forum for a story of this type, where there is no actual story, just a loose collection of events and disjointed memory tableaux.

Really well written, great story, me wants more :D

Thanks for the comments so far. My last few stories where experiments into new ideas.

The idea for this story, was to start with the present giving an intro into some recent trouble and a non-traditional relationship, then flashback into why this sorted relationship exists, while connecting it to that trouble. Then to finish it with a heightened emotional reaction to that original trouble with an emphasis on remembering where a safe place is.

But I guess if I have to explain it, the style didn't really work :) thanks for the input.

I can't understand the comments made by the most recent Anonymous posters. I found this story easy to read for the most part. It switched from a first person to a third person narrative in one section, which was annoying, but that's about all. With respect to the author's most recent comment regarding the story's style, I would say it was very successful. Thanks.

very sexy! well done!

A fantastic storyline and a well written story with a very good edit that made the reading go so smoothly.

The story felt so real and I really wanted the two of them to be together for forever.

Well done and I thoroughly enjoyed the sweet sexy read.

Thanks for sharing

if its true ...good for u ..but still never give up on love if u two were happy then why change it ...who cares about anything else

Why did her creep of a brother allow Ben to do that to her??? That all this story told me, her brother was a weak creep...