All Comments on 'Please and Thank You'

Extremely well written! Very good pacing and description. My only comment would be to make some of the paragraphs shorter. I loved that you didn't quantify any body parts with numbers... no 8" dick, no D cup breasts, etc. So many writers feels such descriptions are needed to describe people while it's so much better to leave that to the reader's imagination. Well done!

too much lead in to finally having sex and then the sex was terrible. He was fumbling so much around trying figure out what she wanted that the story fell flat. But then again, he was such a "good boy". A 2.