All Comments on 'Please Wait for Me'

David Patrick. This was epic and you sir are a Giant,...

yup, I too am wishing for a follow up. please!!!!!! I am begging.

Wow. Well done.

Beautiful. Thank you so much.

Fantastic I would like to see a sequel

So beautiful! Thank you.

Please Wait For Me is such a sweet tease. I wish you would continue Luke and James’ story. Did Luke survive and come back to his Jimmy?

This turned out to be such a lovely story. I would love to read the sequel.

What a beautiful, beautiful story! Thank you.

One true measure of a story is if it attracts the reader back for a second or third reading.

This story fits that description. I is so heart-warming, kind, and full of love, that it is almost an 'immortal' story.

I wonder: have you written or considered writting a sequel? When 'Guppy' gets out of the service?

DV19

Now that is a live story! Awesome

This is about love lost and love found. It was simply beautiful. Thank you.

This story is wonderful - thank you!

I have read this story so many times over the years, and never tire of it. The way that Luke developed and came out of his shell as did Jimmy was just so well written and so well put together it is clearly a classic, it is the number-one story for me on this platform. I understand why you may not have written a sequel to this, you have left it up to us in our minds to write the sequel. For me after completing a couple periods of enlistment and them spending every moment off base they could together Luke comes back proven to himself that he’s more, much more than his parents thought of him, but now believing that he is the man James always saw in him, they build a life together happy in each other, finding the love that they have that fills them completely. Thank you David for writing such a great story, thank you.

I can not tell you how many times I have come back to re-read this story. The fact I found it simply in passing was amazing, like something pulled me to this story. I keep drawn back. It doesn't hurt that it takes place in the Kansas City area where I'm from. The poignancy of this story. It's elegant, classy and timeless. There aren't enough stars to give to this story. After reading the ending (every time) I wish there was more or a sequel. Bless you for sharing this with us.

Make sure you read “A Tale as Old as Time”, as well as all his other works.

OH. MY. GOD.

This is one of the most amazing love stories I've ever read. If I could give it 10 stars I would. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

I love love love love love love ❤️❤️❤️ this story!!! I especially love that James is autistic (it takes one to know one 😂). And I completely related to his journey. I also appreciated that he truly loved his wife and didn’t dishonor her memory. James’ life is a true testament that love is love.

The story kept popping up for me but I never got past their first trip to Belton. I’m sure I was heartbroken for Luke (I didn’t understand the emotion at the time). I never processed the title so I didn’t realize it was the story I never finished until I after I started reading. I’m SOOOOO GLAD I finally finished. Thank you for sharing this story with us. My heart is full.

You’re also a good writer.

A proper good read. Just truly a great story . What happens next?

Loved the story, simply wished there wasn’t a focus on James wanting to “correct” the way Luke talked. “Ain’t” is a word and frankly, as someone who uses it with AAVE, it’s insulting to see it referenced as incorrect.

This was my 2nd time reading this story, and I loved it more the 2nd time through. I did not cry as much as I did the first time I read it. You are a fantastic writer. I felt like I knew these 2 characters, and I was rooting for them the whole time. This was a sad HEA story and I mean that in a good way. This has become my all time favorite story on this site. I have asked before and I'm going to ask again, @DavidPatrick, please, please, please write a follow up story for these 2 characters. I know HEA stories aren't exactly your thing, but this story deserves so much more. Please consider this request, and above all, please keep writing!!! You are amazing!!!

David,

I think I’ve read this story 30 or more times since I first found it. The piece just resonates with me. And each time as I read it again, I wish there was more. It’s “like a movie, it’s like a song!” And I can’t get it out of my head.

What I like about your stories, is that you seem to write from experience. I know some of the places and things that you present to us are actual. Just makes me feel like I’m there. So, thank-you for sharing with us. And me. Please, please, PLEASE keep writing! You have such a gift.

Omg I need to know more!!!! Please write more about this sweet couple!!!

Why did that make me cry so much!!! Please please please do some sort of follow up on this story!!! This was by far one of the best stories I've read on this site. I get that it's a story, but damn I was heartbroken in a way when I finished. What an incredible story!!! Thank you for that

I really enjoyed this story. Wish I could find more along these lines!

So amazing and romantic, really loved it. Thx for sharing your gift of a great story :)

Fabulous story!

I read this several years ago and just happened upon it again. It was just as wonderful as I remembered. A great love story. Five stars!

By far one of the best stories I’ve read on here. Beautiful love story.

This is, without having the death of a spouse, how I want my life to end up. The way you write leads me as though I am actually there, or even better yet - one of the characters. I felt alive, I’ve never had so much precum oozing reading a story as I have this one, you made it romantic, beautiful, nothing tawdry at all, just magnificent! You are a class act and even more so an incredible writer! Thank you for sharing your incredible gift!

What a lovely story all the way through…so well done. Bravo & thank you!

You take my heart and crush it to mend it to fill it with those damn good feels. I want Guppy to come home. Please continue this story.

Finally, a well constructed ,beautifully written plausible story, more captivating for the build up as opposed to the orgasms. Thank you for the engagement, the entertainment, the beauty and the joy.

Wow. What a gorgeous (and hot) love story. And an unexpectedly comforting take on loss. 5 stars for you, sir. I read the whole story in one sitting. Two beautifully drawn characters who really touched me. Thanks for sharing your writing here.

Simply endearing.

Have you ever considered a follow up?

I keep returning to this lovely story. It touched me in so many ways. How beautifully written and told. I love the way it slowly builds to an enduring love between two basically sweet individuals from completely different circumstancs who share the same needs; the touch, love and understanding of another. I like the way each one improves the life of the other. Their beautiful story brought tears to my eyes. I hope this writer continues with more touching stories.

Being from and living near Kansas City, I was drawn in and I can only imagine the places they went. Were James and Luke real, I may have crossed paths. I can imagine where James lives. I can see myself in both of them. In James, my silent bisexuality. My wife doesn't know. I felt for James as I would be lost too. In Luke, the want to be rescued but I think there is a little of that in all of us. Please, please, please add to their story. It deserves to be continued. I've come back to this story numerous times since I found it. It has affected me in a way I can't describe. I gave it 5 stars because there wasn't a higher rating. You are brilliant story teller, please keep it up.

Being from and living near Kansas City, I was drawn in. Makes me wish I was Luke. This was an awesome story, I'd love to see more they're continuing story.

Love this story....Is there going to be more?

I keep reading this over, and I enjoy it more each time....

Once again I've been sucked into a wonderful world of your creation. Thank you!

I come back to read this story a few times a year. If you don't make a part two I will be forced to.. I don't know, but it won't be pretty😁. Your work is so beautiful.

Man, your work is really amazing. I love bittersweet stories and this is one of the best. I can’t wait to read another story from you.

I loved this.

What a beautiful and well-written tale.

I feel the hurt in both men, cannot understand how Like turned out to be such a balanced guy (despite being very guarded) and love it that both have found happiness. Please continue.

For many years I was married to a lovely woman who passed away. We were best friends and her loss was devastating, but I had been attracted to men ever since I started getting erections. Like you, I cannot imagine marrying another woman, but if the right man came along..

We'll done and keep writing. Mark.

What an absolutely wonderful story! I am sure I am not the only one but I would love a sequel with how they work their relationship out. For now I in my mind Luke comes back to Jimmy and they live a happy long life together!! I look forward to reading the other stories you have written. This is definitely one of the best stories I have read on this site!

This is so amazing and sweet, I am straight but this made me feel emotionally and mentally more accepted in society, thank you so much for writing this I needed this

I have been reading your stories and at points I have literally wept at the hurt and pain these characters have experienced. I am a fairly tough old school, mature, Bi/Gay male, leaning more and more it seems to the gay end of the spectrum. Likely because I am finally able to be more honest with myself at this point in my life. Life has not been easy for me, as even appearing to be gay was not an option for me in the late 60's and 70's (middle and high school times) and with my own religious brainwashing or beliefs. I have experienced a great deal of confusion, hurt, and pain while trying to come to terms with my own sexual attractions over many years. I have always seemed to be attracted most to my mostly Straight sometimes curious buddies. I have fallen in love with several of them and tried to deal with the guilt or unrequited feelings after something sexual had actually happened! So I guess I understand the difficulty and suffering that happens when reputations and lives are damaged by homophobic, zealous, religious bigots, when secret sexual things somehow become exposed.

Out of all the stories I have read from DavidPatrick, this one really cries for a good squeal. It was so beautiful as Luke and Jimmy were finding each other and both being healed and helped and loved back to life. I would love to read a continuation of these two's coming back together, and hopefully finding a rewarding and wonderful happy ending!!! Please consider continuing with this wonderful story......

Reading through this wonderful story once more, I was just as "turned on" as I was in the first reading.

How Luke was able to turn out to be such a wonderful person with the upbringing he received from his wowser, Bible-only parents. Everything seemed to be about "sin", not about how God had created us so wonderfully. It's a wonder Luke was ever conceived at all with their attitude towards sex, not accepting it as a gift from God. Maybe the mother thought it was God's punishment when she conceived? and Luke was the result of their coupling?

How wonderful that James came along as saviour for him.

Thank you again, DavidPatrick for this wonderful, caring story. Patrick (Spadger2)

The only quibble I have is James misuses 'nonplussed'. It means flabbergasted or at a loss for words. Perhaps I misread the context but it seems to be used to suggest calmness, not getting flustered.

I've eaten at the McDonald's on Fifth Street many times.

Truly a wonderful story. One of the best I've ever read on this site.

Dear DavidPatrick,

I just had to read this wonderful story right through again, and was just as moved as in my first reading.

I find it difficult to comprehend the kid of Christianity that "Guppy's" parents believed in. Christ's teaching was one of love, but his Bible-bashing parents seemed to concentrate on sinfulness. I wonder what kind of sexual relationship they had, and if there was any love between them.

How wonderful that James had that initial attraction to 'Guppy' and how he was able to teach him a little about life - swimming, for instance.

Let us hope that James was able to guide him through life - even at a disance, while he was serving in the armed forces, where he seems to have found hi niche'.

Love and best wishes from Patrick (Spadger2)

What an amazing, sexy, romantic story! Thank you for putting such work, thought and feeling into this. This brightened my whole day!

This is my second reading of this wonderful story, but I had to come back to it to re-read it.

What a beautiful, innocent young man Luke is. And James is treating him with all the delicacy that he can muster, because he knows that Luke deserves it.

How could one not love the pair of them, and their developing relationship. I was nearly moved to tears at times because of Luke's trusting innocence.

I hope we hear more of them in the future. Such a beautiful love story. It made me wonder if this was real or just the author's wonderful imagination. Patrick J.

What a beautiful, touching love story.

Jimmy's initial attraction to "Guppy" at the airport gate was a Godsend to the both of them.

Guppy's innocence in relation to sexual matters is very touching, and James kindness towards him was rewarded by a loving response that the younger man had never known.

It's a wonder that he ever came into existence with parents who looked on almost everything as sinful. Maybe they had only a 'one night' stand and the vinegary mother accidentally concieved, probably regarding the resultant child as punishment for their "sin".

Let us pray that the young soldier is able to keep in touch with James while he is on military service. Obviously he has never experienced any real affection before his interaction with James.

I wonder what kind of God his parents believed in that they could not show affection to this innocent, naive young man.

Loved your story, DavidPatrick.

Patrick J.

I had to get myself off reading the last chapter. Please keep writing a sequel. Your writing skill is great!

I am sure this is one of the most beautiful stories I have read. Who can query the Love between James and Luke. I have been hesitant about the idea of same-sex marriage, but I am sure it can be blessed by God if there is such love as this between the two participants.

The way you have put so thought and liveliness into every sentence is remarkable. Loved every moment . Please write a sequel of this .

Please please don't let this story end.... so many possibilities would live to read until they grow old together ... now that would be a great love story...

Please please please continue this story

Hi,

great story! I am speechless and can't say how heartwarming your story is. Hope to read the next chapter soon!

I absolutely loved this story. I know you've posted that you're having trouble seeing the contours of a next chapter for these two men but if it helps, I'll beg. Please find whatever inspiration it takes to continue their story. Jimmy has to wait and Guppy has to return.

Except to say that I feel fortunate to have stumbled across this superbly written love story, I will refrain from expressing too many well-deserved platitudes. While no two lives are exactly alike, I saw brief glimpses of myself in both Luke and James. A big difference -- and quite a surprise -- was Luke's awareness of James' intent from the beginning. For one with no previous experience, he showed much more awareness and insight of what was happening by mumbling aloud to test the waters. While realistic but fictional, my best wishes to all who find themselves similarly situated. Whether or not a sequel is forthcoming, I look forward to reading many more of your wonderful stories.

Please write an epilouge to this story it has captured my heart again and again i would really like to see luke return to james

They were both sleepwalking thru life and found each other.... just love it

Thank you

Sorry, but I am not he.

I might be wrong or I might be right but you remind me of someone called Patrick hemming,he was in my school at Wilson but at the end of this year I had to move because of personal business(if this was the Patrick I was talking about he'd know) I'm moving soon this month most likely next week :'( I'm gonna miss all my friends

If this isn't the Patrick in talking about then this was an amazing story either way it was an amazing story

Yours truly, harley

Such a great and loving story, cannot wait to see what happens between the two of them. Hope they get inside each other

This was amazing! It is so well written, I couldn't help but keep reading. Please keep up with this story as I can't wait to read more!!

This brought tears to my eyes.... happy that they met and explored themselves as well as each other. Sad because they're apart now and afraid for what the future might hold for them. Truly a wonderful story and would make for an amazing movie.

Please continue this story. It is by far the best I have read in a long time. Thank you for writing it and I hope Jimmy and Guppy have a great second chapter that I know you are just dying to write ;)

Please write a second one. i want to know what happens.

Really really enjoyed this steamy erotic loving well crafted wonderfully done

This is my second time round for this amazing story, I may be making the same comment as I did previously, but I am a 47 year old going through menopause with little memory. I had to say I agree with your religious comments, I was raised strict Catholic, but I have not entered a church in decades, I can not understand arrogance and ignorance that condones paedophiles but not homosexuality. It is a sin to love someone of the same sex, but ok to molest the innocence, how fucked up is that.

The absolute best story I have ever read. I sure hope there's more when he gets out of the army... this could be a best seller and award winning movie...

Really loved this I do hope there's a continuation

This is one of the most beautiful stories I have ever read. Will you continue it for us? I love the way you write!

I love your plot and how you make your story flow in emotion and affection. Both characters were displayed brilliantly. The only thing I don't like was the fact that you kept on bringing his wife name in almost every scene in the story. I know this might sound inappropriate but it made me think that Jim decided to be with Luke just because he wanted to feel like his wife was with him not because he loved Luke. This is just my suggestion only. I do not intend to offend or criticize your work.

I love your work, David! Thank you for another great read.

I came to this site for a quick salacious read to get me hot for my solo rub before bed. What instead I got was a beautifully written story. I could literally see them at the airport, in the pool on those many days, at the dinner table, in the bathtub, in bed. David, this was a beautifully written story. Slow and deliberate. Kept me hooked pages 1 through 8. Not camp or banal. 5 stars.

No rushed pace, no contrived scenes, just a beautifully composed and inspirational love story. Could not stop reading until the end. Thank you, David.

I read myself out of one year and into another reading your story. It is the best story I have ever read on the various sites that host this kind of stories. I got more and more nervous toward the end that the story was going to end with James getting a telegram saying the Guppy had been killed in action -- except the telegram wouldn't come to Jim; it would go to the ugly parents who would see it as "'god's will." Any chance of continuing this story? Well, for now -- I am off to read the rest of your stories!

This story was perfect. I cried at the end. I'd love to see maybe a small story of them reuniting. Wonderful work.

I came across this title by chance in the Hall of Fame section. So many of the titles are stories I've read, reread, and enjoyed. This title was new and piqued my interest. I read the story in one sitting and enjoyed every minute. It was well crafted. The characters were believable and people you cared about. The build up to romance was slow and realistic. Thank you for a most enjoyable story. Jeff

I almost passed over this story and completely ignored it. I'm so glad that I didn't. This story was absolutely beautiful and has very easily become my favorite out of all the stories I've read on Lit. Thank you so much for all the work you put into writing this.

This story was not written in haste, it is an amazing piece of fine writing and psycho-logical development. The young soldier only had a few days, and the deliberate slow and steady pace of development is a masterful accomplishment. This is hard to do. It is this process, which in life usually takes years, and which I would say betrays that it is fiction. But so much of it rings true to life. Rarely does one find this kind of writing anywhere.

Dear writer,

You deserve more than a 5 star. I can see myself in the story.

The vivid descriptions and narrative skill, the sweet innocence of Luke, the practicality of falling in love rather than random sex.

Its all beautiful. Don't stop writing,keep sharing your beautiful soul with us.

I cried. This was absolutely beautiful. You are supremely talented. Thank you for sharing your gift with us.

The last few paragraphs made me cry like a little kid. I'm a huge fan of your work and you're really talented.

waiting for a love like this...........five plus stars

Five stars are not enough to rank this story. The characters are unusual, but believable at the same time, the inner dialog is remarkable, the language is not only right, but beautiful... The images are so vivid, and the dialogs between them are so good, specially when Luke said all those romantic phrases without knowing.

I don´t know if I want a second chapter. I feel like this is a story finished.

congratulations, very good work.

It's good. It's almost real that I was able to put myself into the story.

that is the best gay romance story i have ever read best of all fantastic . jonathan

Really enjoyed that

hope there is a follow up story of when Luke returns to James

I want know wat happen next part heart touching story

I had no idea that a kiss would change my life forever. I've always been very oral and never even thought about much of anything else. That all changed one day with one short kiss. In a few months, we were in love and I can't imagine life without him.

Please. 😁

This story ticked all the boxes for this romantic!! So nice to read a story that isn't full of angst and tragedy, but instead a slow buildup of love and acceptance. PLEASE keep writing stories like this!

Wonderful story. I have an E5 grin.

Thanks so much and keep writing!!!! 👊🏻👊🏻👊🏻

This story was a great read. I am a slow reader so it was about 3 hours of pure joy watching this fabulous relationship develop. The pressure of time pushing James to move forward yet the uncertainty over whether or not his advances were welcome. A true love developing before my eyes as I read and in my mind I was right there in the middle of the story. I don't really know if I wanted to be James or Luke, but I was leaning toward Luke. Then when James made love to him and took his penis in his mouth I wanted to be James. I loved both characters. I agree with a lot of commenters that there is another story here, but it would be very difficult as a writer to match what you have already done with this story. Bravo!