All Comments on 'Pop Up Club Pt. 01'

Like how this story starts and would love to read more. I already enjoy the submissive’s personality. The Dominant’s speech is a bit formal. It would help to get a more information on his character or more of a sense of his personality. Did he put his first date in the cab because he was done with her or because she didn’t work out? What is he like really?.

Very good so far. Nice cliffhanger. Now get back to writing, or else ;)

I just submitted the second chapter so hopefully there are no errors and it gets published! I know Dominik seems a little hard and doesn't have a lot of character yet but it will come with time, I have a plan. Glad you all liked it, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story as it comes.