All Comments on 'Porn Star for a Day'

It was too much, too hard for a story like this. You could have detailed it better. Don't spare your time on writing the scenes.

In places and frequently too much were the "--" junk lilkely improperly used. A pause is indicated by a coma (,) pure junk writing style to use improper things. Makes it appear not even early grade school level grammar.

You write well -- keep it up. Notice the "--"; a comma really wouldn't do.

I really enjoyed the free spirit, innocent quality of it all. Looking forward to more stories in the future.

Thank you for your comment and sorry you didn't enjoy the story. I knew it was a pretty hard story, so I tried to tag it appropriately.

Writing about a gang bang was difficult. Too often, what I wrote just seemed repetitive and boring. That is the nature of nine guys doing pretty much the same thing. So I took a different approach, more abstract and less specific. Kind of a "and they just kept coming" thing.

The em dash is a perfectly acceptable form of punctuation. Here's a good article from the AP Style Blog: http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2010/09/computer-editing-tip-em-dashes.html.

If you're on a Mac, you can create one — should you wish — by holding down the Shift and Option keys before hitting the minus key (next to the zero key).

There is a debate as to whether there should be spaces around the em dash (and I clearly think there should be). This—to my mind—looks awful.

And nice use of a semi-colon.

Literotica — the home of kinky, perverted punctuation nerds!

What a gang-bang porn adventure! Fabulous! LOL @ literotica the home of frustrated punctuation nerds-nazis!

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed the story!

I'm working my way through you stories; wonderful images are conveyed. Thank you.

No, sir. Thank you.

Not very explicit. Did the girls have tits? If so were they felt up?

Nothing about body shapes, sizes or anything really. Not very

sexy at all. My dick is still limp.