All Comments on 'Proper Military Bearing Ch. 01'

this was really good, thankyou

Am interested in seeing which path the lead character choses, the motives and reactions of the other characters. The father - son relationship has not been explained yet and its background should be developed more so it explains the inter-reactions between the two males vying for the same female.

He has got to accept that he is 'good enough' for her, and the journey his son takes to maturity might be good, too (if boring in this story! :-)

More please?

Roger

Sensuous, well-written story! I could have done without Rick coming home at the end, but maybe this is necessary to set up the next episode.

Incredibly good piece of erotic writing. To be able to build characters and situations with such deft strokes is a gift....and a joy to read!

Not one word is out of place....No wanton use of profanity...

Just let me say....I could "see" the characters....and I could "see" the situation as it unfolded "in front of me"!

Keep writing....and good luck!

Probably the most well writen story I have ever read here ... and I have read LOTS of them. I think I am in love with your talent. Thomas

This was very well written! Love the way you developed the characters. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I loved your story and it was very well Written...

PLEASE WRITE MORE OF THIS EXCITING STORY.....

Better than a romance novel, erotic, yet not trashy. Very good read. Hope there is more!!

Yeaah i enjoyed this too much i guess :)

Cant wait to read more!

but the ending gives it a bonus point,.

wacky

dickyless

crap

finger u rectum and lick it

Absolutely one of the best reads on literotica. Your description of the small detailed emotions, physical movements and setting is second to none. Absolutely marvelous!