All Comments on 'Proud and Possessive'

There's a solid foundation here but it felt like things were missing. It seemed like the two main characters knew each other (they seemed to know each other's names and desires without there being any formal introduction in the story), but that's never really explained properly. Are they enemies? Friends? Lovers? Swingers? Exes? Something else? More clarity on that would help the story.

There were also moments when everything seemed to jump around in a distorted way. When Sandro pushes Laurent away during the blowjob scene, Laurent somehow ends up lying down on the ground behind him. Small detail, but clearly showing the positioning and movement of the characters helps to create a much more vivid narrative.

This was very raunchy and had just the right amount of dominating passion for me. That being said, I would love if there was more of a backstory to it to really see the character development and understand their feelings.

I enjoyed the story, but just like the comment above me I feel like there's a lot missing. Especially between those two characters I would personally like to know what is going on between and the part when the other suddenly pushed the one on to the floor had me a bit confused, this could be a much longer story but oh well it's not mine but yours so you decide what you. Anyway I genuinely enjoyed it, but it could've been better