All Comments on 'Provocative Encounter'

by Just_Peachy

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Peaches

I like your peach analogy, but maybe it was used once or twice too many.

Her body "shudders" rather than "shutters."

Odd POV, but readable and easy to follow.

Just_PeachyJust_Peachyover 6 years agoAuthor
Thank you!

Thank you, ExSoCalLaw, for sharing your thoughts!

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