by kromen
Good story, but the timelines need work. Your characters aren't dating, much less sleeping together, until well after September 11th, yet the ages of their children are 9 and 5? This stuck out like a sore thumb and shot the believability.
Beautiful story, very well-written! I actually like to know and care about the characters in a story, and this did not disappoint. Lovely! I will look for more of your stories.