All Comments on 'Rain in the Park'

Ending was too sudden and abrupt

Unbelievable and so manly. Ugh!

That the "author" was satisfied enough so that HE submitted his text for others to read is disappointing. Very poorly done.

Man you gat to give me more !

Wasn't to bad. A few points, if you start writing in the first person continue with it don't swap to a third person perspective & secondly more deatil in the sex scenes would be could.

very well written, I loved it

The sexual activities did not progress enough to turn me on.