All Comments on 'Raising the Flag'

I would have preferred more Revenge.

Brilliant idea though.

Way to totally emasculate yourself at the end. The opportunistic slut and unscrupulous entitled asshole win in the end.

I’ll give you this, you managed to launch past any pigeonholes. That probably just translates to annoying almost everyone, but it was a different take.

Original, which is one of best compliments in LW.

So looking forward to more of your work. Thank you.

Low score from me. The husband is the bad guy because he humiliates his wife? No, that logic doesn't work for me nor does him being worthy of being cheated on. This entire story seems built on the fact the wife was right to cheat, nothing wrong with cheating as he was boring and a "lesser man" whereas Freddy is right to take his wife because he's so important and defended her after her husband tried to humiliate her.

Bad

It's pure delusion to believe a man would be that apologetic for something so small given the situation.

All I see is that she let peer pressure get to her, cheats and gets away with it, pretty dumb, you don't just marry someone for no reason. Bill deserved better, sorry that he wasn't from your "class" but he was able to woo, not with money or stature, that should have told her something. Then to make the lover look like the hero, sorry, but in terms of character, Freddy is just as shitty, going after a married woman is a no.

good workup, disappointing ending!

This is more of a story of humiliation and embarrassment.

First 10 paragraphs and you know its not worth reading anymore

I can't believe you let your main character cave in, in favor of an asshole & a slut.

On top of all that he credits asshole how good he is.

Well... it is your story, you can do it as you like it.

Problem with writers like you is that you jump on moral ground in favor of a peace of shit. -1

Brilliant story. The rich alpha wins and the regular guy must simply cope. Very true to life.

I’d say the fact the guy his wife cheated on her husband with didn’t at all win on character. Him setting out to seduce a married woman, both of them intending to humiliate the husband and the sister enabling the whole thing showed they all lacked character.

The husband childish behaviour has a result of pain, anger and humiliation tainted his but still left him above everyone else.

Poor idea for a tale, bit short so little valuable time was lost in reading it

That was an awful story made even worse by the author injecting his own ignorant and misguided political opinion on a subject he knows nothing about. This did nothing to advance the story line but it did out the author as an ignorant knuckle dragging troglodyte. Then he writes a story about here the cheated on husband is somehow a villain and the cheating Lothario is a hero. An epic fail and not even worth one star.

What a dork! Bill deserves everything he got and gets. A dumb whore, with a dumber cuck husband, who will take everything he owns.

Hate the ending. She deserves the embarrassment and public shaming.

Needs some follow-up, please.

You are going to get many, many haters on this ending. I understand many of them will be coming for the US. Mostly because in the US we don’t have the same since of Honor, Humor or self-reflection as other parts of the world. I am not saying that we don’t have those attributes. Just that we don’t use them as much as others around the globe. So having her not be embarrassed is mostly NOT something we would tolerate. I am LOL at my last statement because having lived all of the world and spending time in UK I really enjoy the British since of humor and honor.

I enjoyed my time living in England and other UK nations. However, I will not ever give up my love of the US and how many more freedoms we have than other nations of the world. I will however always love the personal changes and awakenings that have come from living in other nations allowing me to grow into a better person understanding that the world is made up of many points of view and each has its uniqueness. I loved the resolution you created in the story and with your ending. The tale earned the Outstanding Read ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ rating I gave it.

I only have one request. That is if you would, finish the tale with a Life Well Lived for all parties. However, have the wife find out she was just a fling for the lover, but allow her designs take off.

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

The ending sucked. Freddy is a low life lothario who targeted a married woman and wrecked a marriage. Why should Bill help him to save face? Bill should have come clean with the entire party to what was going on and ditched the bitch.

I'm going to vehemently disagree with JF4Fun. He seems to have misconstrued honor with reputation. Freddy saved Deborah's reputation. But her honor? He and she have sullied it beyond measure, repeatedly. I would cite to another, better author on this:

https://www.goodreads.com/quotes/5944717-reputation-is-what-other-people-know-about-you-honor-is

As for Bill's comment at the end? No Freddy can't compete on character. You have to have some, to compete, and bluntly, he doesn't.

Needs a part 2

Awwww, so cute....another cucky wucky writer.

"He thinks he wants to be a man but he's just another of those pencil dicks who whine and moan about the climate." - Why is she married to him if she holds him in such contempt?

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"He's going to know." - Why does she care?

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"Dammit she's a married woman" - Maybe he should have thought of that before he fucked her!

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Was going good until he surrendered, turned himself into a cuck.

Bill should have told the truth, not helped them with the cover-up.

It was well written. BUT... the basic premise, of the cuck husband just accepting what his cheating slut wife and the arsehole cheater did, was totally ridiculous! We are meant to think that it was all so civilised. When it's just an example of a weak and pathetic husband, without any backbone nor self respect, laying down and letting the cheating slut couple treat him like a doormat.

Why wouldn't he destroy the slut's reputation and possible future design business? Back in the day, it would be a duel at dawn.

A good LW story includes an actual loving wife. This whore is despicable. She has no love or respect for Fred, so no loss for him to just walk away. The icing on this shit cake of a story is Fred thanking the man who just fucked his wife for saving wifey's face with that utterly unbelievable story. I would have dragged her cheating ass naked through the party and exposed her for the whore that she is.

Oop. I confused Bill with Fred. Easy to do when the story is barely memorable.

I was pleasantly surprised by this tale. Well done.

cucks get one star

"Ladies and gentlemen, I am Bill Short, Deborah's husband and I just want to say, 'Freddy you are a complete bastard'."

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How it should have ended

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"If you really wanted to help my wife you wouldnt have seduced her and made her fucking you part of the business plan. That dress is there becuase I put it there while you and this faithless whore were rutting like animals. I dont know how many of other other wives in this crowd youve had you way with, but unlike all those cucks who care more about your money than their marrige vows I will not be silent, I will not accept a faithless slut in my life and I will not look the other way to get thirty peices of silver for betraying my marrige. Keep the slut I know longer want her."

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I turned to look at my my soon to be ex-wife, "Dont worry dear, I'm sure all the people you need to help you will be willing to fuck you as well."

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Then I turned and walked away and never said a single word to her again for the rest of my life.

Well hooray for the wealthy aristocratic lothario. The man born with a gold spoon in his mouth and weaned on champagne and caviar. He knows what's best for the beautiful married woman who suffers from the indignation of being married to a commoner. He could have any beautiful eligible single woman around as his trophy. But he sacrifices himself by stooping to the level of Cad in order to save the beautiful married woman from her plain husband.

What a load of shite! Well 87tales, you blew it on your 1st tale. Everyone deserves some dignity in life. Bill Short's character no less so. You didn't just rob him of that, you stole everything he had and gave it to Freddy, an entitled prat who once you get to know him skin deep, he's a total minge.

Similar to the new testament parable about a poor man with one lamb. Freddy's wealthy and could own many lambs. His family throws a big expensive party and invites others just like them. Except for Bill. I understand Freddy inviting Deborah, but why Bill? Deborah could have just lied to Bill and gone to the party without him. Why did Freddy include Bill in the invitation? Because he wanted Bill to be there when he took his single lamb Deborah away from him. Because despite his money, good looks, charm, and intelligence Freddy is a thief who stole Bill's solely prized possession, Deborah. Freddy is a blackgaurd. My lowest rating.

a five

All characters behavior fit.

Well told.

No, they deserved much worse. He let the cheaters win. Bill is the worst wimp in LW. 2 stars! Infuriating ending. Also unfinished stories suck. Please leave it at one story.

Plain crap

If the Yankees wouldn’t have helped the sissy-brits, we will have made some real man outa them sorrow asses. Schwache fotzen.

Fritz

This reminds me of the tale of Andrew Parker Bowles, Camilla, and Prince Charles. I wonder if Bill will get a reward for his obeisance to Freddy. Parker Bowles retired as a Brigadier. A handsome reward for giving Royalty the free use of his wife. At least give poor Bill a better set of clothes than that Nehru jacket. A trip to Huntsman's on Saville Row might be in order.

Stories obviously produced by children should be removed outright due to the K-18 policy.

Terrible ending

A rich cock sucker steals a less wealthy man's wife.

An entitled bitch chases a wallet.

Way to go.

He's a john, and she's a whore.

The pillars of society.

It'd be fun watching this implode. lol

5*

So many interesting thoughts and events in such a short story. Would like to see a second chapter.

The ending was BS

Not bad. Understand how you wanted to leave it at the end. People who read these stories want a more complete ending with consequences for their actions. They don’t like leave it to the reader to finished what happened. Let other authors do a part 2if you don’t want to do it yourself.

Authors certainly have the right to make their MCs wimpy little beta boys, but common decency should compel them to taf their stories properly so only cream-pie loving little cucks will read them.

While the writing was concise and the grammar decent, the failure to properly tag this steaming pile of horseshit earns 1(.

Cost too high for Bill

Praise too great for Freddy

Had a range of emotions just like all marriage ending events really have but the end was too shallow to benefit from a pretty great set up.

Frigging stupid, husband should've put his genitals up flagpole since he surely has none.

Had potential, turned out very poor. Not worth the read.

FTDS

I loved the ending. Two consciences have been pricked. I suspect that the husband is aware of the forces that is operating against his marriage and the wife has not rallied to defend it.

It seems that there is poor communication and a selfish feminine drive. The divorce process will continue which will allow further introspection and the intruder needs to examine his own morals. Further discussion now will entrenched the separation, there needs to be a pause for consideration.

I would like to know how the story progresses from this point!

So that’s it? I guess we will just have to use a little imagination as to the final disposition of the marriage. I suppose from the last two paragraphs they are done. I think in the good old USA we would have done more than run her clothes up a pole. Perhaps shotguns to add fresh holes. Or fresh holes in the cheating couple. In the end it all seemed pointless, as the marriage was already DOA. Just legalities to attend to now. Sad. I think divorce seems unavoidable for this mismatched couple. They never should have wed in the first place.

Хороший рассказ но нужно продолжение

Yes that is the end. The best that can be concluded. Bill files for a divorce.

This is only a partial story

All that need be said. Tied up very neatly. Seven out of five stars!

86 tales to go. I hope they get better.

.....wtf?

If ever a story needed ann ending this is it. Did she realize how much she loved him and did she regret her foolish tryst and did she realize how he saved her reputation and career? Or did she just dump him and carry on to be a famous designer? Finish this cliffhanger.