All Comments on 'Raking Around the Family Tree'

Great tease evoking images of things to come! ;-) Well done. Five stars.

The tension here is quite palpable, spurred on by the perhaps intentional, perhaps not, innuendo in the conversation. The "will they or won't they" question is about to be answered. Perhaps a second chapter??

Great start. You need to continue this. It is getting hot.

So many fathers and daughters have these special moments but give in to societal norms rather than desires. Very well written as I felt as if I was taking part in the beautiful fall afternoon.I

Perhaps your best story.

This one was hyper sexy! If anyone tried to get me out of a warm bed on a cold fall day to rake leaves, he'd be in big trouble. Yet another advantage of apartment living in Manhattan! No surprise, given it's you who's the author, but I loved the story, and it won't even make me late for work. Like LFT, I give it 5* -- JB

Wow, you’ve packed more heat into a “no-sex” story than most writers get into a 30,000-word tome. I really, really enjoy your writing!

Also living in the Northeast, this story feels so real before the sex part, which is part of what makes it work so well. You care as much about the setup as the payoff. All of the story gets your full attention (and thus mine). This is the second word limit story you have posted. Perhaps that drives your creativity.

You pack more sensuality and emotion in 1,000 words than most people could with ten times as many - even in a sexless story!

Your dialog is realistic, and your sentences punchy. So jealous of your talents!

Thanks for posting!!!

I enjoyed reading about their relationship. Thanks for sharing.

I love your style. I always find myself unable to stop reading your stories, even when I really should lol I can't wait to see what other naughty sexy shenanigans your characters get into. I can only hope the story I'm currently working on even comes close to comparing to yours. Keep up the great work.

Mitchie's details always add so much reality to her stories. The little things like the Freihofer's cinnamon buns and things like that. Can't wait for Part 2. Keep up the good work, Mitchie.

Uncle Jay

Doesn't bode well

"I just don't come crying to me when you lose."

The story was rushed, I know it had a 1000 word limit but as you're writing POV there should be a lot more feelings and build up... the last two sentences weren't needed. Leaving it on a cliff hanger would have been better

I also like the fact each time you get a hot story you take off the ratings... that's the sign of an insecure writer!

“that's the sign of an insecure writer!”

— says the guy who leaves anonymous comments!

Great and lovely as always... love your f/d tales. Thank you!

I think I’m falling in love with your short story writing, keep up the good work. I’m a fan.

For a story that had the confines of 1000 words that was excellent. I'm only sorry that those restrictions meant there was so little to what could be a beautiful read, but I still loved it. Maybe in the future you could possibly rework it to stretch it out or even make a series but sometimes less is more.

Very real writing

Thank you

Michael age 67