All Comments on 'Ranch Girl Ch. 01'

Part 2

POV changes are a sign of a lazy writer, but femdom tag is a warning not to read it at all and avoid the POV issues.

Left off a badly needed pissing tag. Pathetic that you lie to your readers that way.

The change of POV is because I wrote this story in much smaller chapters on another website and then put in three chapters from that website into one chapter here. As for the pissing, that’s just a normal staple of erotic fiction and I can’t see why people are so bothered by it. I did not say there would be no pissing so I did not lie. I did say before a couple of times that there’ll be pissing in ALL my future stories, so if you are unable to handle that then I suggest you stop reading right here.

Too many trolls and critics. Not a bad start. Will see if it stays good.

POV: You saw the crush on a nerd description, but not the tags, and thought this was a vanilla/wholesome erotic story.

You mean that young boy doesn't know she's a dirty whore? Love or not, doing her bareback, he could get fatal diseases from that slut , even if she loves him...

Sad slut and her cuck boy friend??? Disease anyone??!!