All Comments on 'Rancher's Dream'

DC:

I want to thank you for allowing me to preview the story. I told you that I thought it was your best work to date. Reading the published version after you and your editor worked it over, I'm sure of it. Of course this Horny 'ol Sailor is a sucker for love stories with happy endings so I'm probably a little biased. Congratulations and I have no doubt that this story will soon have a little red "H" after it, like most of your other stories. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Your story kept me in suspense to the very end.

Will they hit it off.

Will they fall in love.

Will he be gone at sunrise.

Now I need a follow up story. Did they move back to the farm. Is Butter going to have a foal.

It's a winner, Red. I enjoyed it tremendously,even after reading the first draft--and there aren't many stories I want to read more than once. Since I can't vote "10," maybe I can get a special dispensation to cast two "5" votes?

Thank you for writing a wonderful romantic story.

This is a romance that most would just love to have for thier own. It is written with a feeling of compassion, caring and love that so many try to achieve and so few do.

Please write more stories of this nature.

DC:

Since you revised the ending I think it only fair that I get to comment on the revision. My comments about the original story still stands. I love the revision. I was a teeny bit disappointed that originally they were going to stay in the big city rather then the place they were the happiest. Now it is the perfect ending. They are starting a family, soon to be married, and happily headed to Arizona. All is well and God is in his heaven. Thank You. Ronnie W.

I Loved your story. It is one of the best that I have read online. It was wonderful.

Sweet tears and hot sex, what a perfect combination.

There were a few grammatical errors in there.

Also, I think the story progressed a little too rapidly. Slow down a little, take your time.

:)

Great story though!

I absolutely loved this story!

This story was absolutely fabulous. Great work.

The story is a gentle, caring, symphony of love. Excellent.

Dan.

I really loved that story. It was too adorable. Thanks for writing this.

RHF,

I'm a sucker for happy endings, Beautiful story. Life is fulla Love and happy endings if we want. I want. I have. Hope all of you will too.

Thanks for writing and sharing with (me) us on Lit. Takes a lot to write and I appreciate what you've written.

best wishes

x

I loved this story! It was absolutely perfect and developed beautifully. Well done.

The beautiful ( I assume so; her heart is GORGEOUS!) and delightfully talented Red has struck again. It is indeed a precious gift to be able to bring love and beauty to a world lacking both, and this superbly talented woman does both with her pen. Thanks, Red! Master Samurai

Beautiful story. You truely have talent!

Just one question; are you morally opposed to the word "than?" It's a minor quibble, but it really did take me out of the story several times when you used "then" for "than."

Otherwise excellent.

i loved it

I loved this story! It was so sweet and endearing! The premise of the story was so touching I almost had tears in my eyes. Bravo!

Beautiful, touching, lovely, perfect.

was just about fucking perfect

Thank you.

and never having to say sorry. TK U MLJ LV NV

that was one of the best i've read. well written. excellent work

Really enjoyed this. Wish it was longer.

Oh wow!! I cried my eyes out. That was beautiful and utterly amazing. Thank u!

I have to admit I had a tear or two in my eyes when I read Jack's note. You have a talent for writing. Thanks for sharing.

Didn't make it past page 1. I like fantasy. That's what this is.But I do like realism or at least believability more. Nobody man nor especially woman, would accept a stranger moving to thier home without 1st being asked and 2nd. receiving permission. If it had been me after my call to Sara it would have been to the sheriff's office. And I wouldn't mind losing Sara's friendship.

I do NOT care what anyone else says, I Liked it...so it's 5 stars -for me..Thanks

I wish I could add more stars to my rating. You have a beautiful gift

For writing. I hope to read more romance themed stories In Future

From you. Must admit you "jerked" a few tears from me too when I read

Jack's letter! Thank You for the story!

One of the best I've ever read. It was so emotional and sweet yet at the same time erotic that it's became my favorite on literotica.

I WONT CRY DAMN IT!..Oh...well...OK...crying now...you happy?

it was just as good this time around as it was the first time i read it. adding it to my favorites for sure; don't want to lose track of it again!

Good story. This is romance that did not need the anal allusion.

Loved it

very romantic

Best romantic story that I've read so far.

X

So....like...well, ya see....I live in Arizona....um...and I was kinda wondering....um....does Jack have a 40+ year old single brother, that, like Jack, knows how to treat a woman right?

Awesome story!

SC8

(But I'm kinda serious about the 'brother' part...) :p

nicely done

I get the feeling metaphysics are not your forte.

I am confused by the spectre of Eric. At the beginning we learn he was killed before his time and would somehow be coming back. She would not recognize his new self but they could be together again.

"He thought it unfair that he had to start over his life with her. It had been perfect before; how would he make her realize she could have that again with him, with his new self. Eyes of blue gazed down one last time on the sleeping woman. One last time, his finger ran over her brow and traced the feel of her lips."

" When would he do this again? When would he touch her? When would he be able to hold her within his embrace? He'd lain beside her for three years, but now she spent the night alone. How could his heart be breaking when it wasn't even there? He shook his head and turned to leave. His body stopped and turned back with a final look around, and then one last look on her body. When would she let him back in? The answers would not come; they would not tell him if she would be his again, or if he'd remember her. He disappeared and the room filled with the coldness of the storm, as his presence left her for the final time."

And then Jack enters her life. Meanwhile Eric is still hovering around. Jack is led to the lost rings. Jack hears a whisper telling him to call her Ella while they are making love. But Jack is not Eric. (The idea of Eric hanging around and even watching them make love is just a bit creepy)

presto chango Eric figures out he doesn't get to come back home after all. The final time he was with her wasn't really the final time. Who ever was telling him stuff was not doing him any favours. You weren't supposed to die yet so you get to go back to your wife. no you don't. This is your last time with her. no it isn't. She is marrying someone else, time for you to move along. But you get to watch from above.

Then there is the whole body or spirit confusion. breaking heart without a heart? body stops to turn back around when he doesn't have a body. " His body ready to return to where it was supposed to be, a watching spirit from above"

huh?

Nice an lovely story.

I liked so much.

Have you wrote a sequel?

5* for you.

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.

then is spelled !!!THAN!!! a or e learn the diff please

Page five, apart from the first couple of paras, was completely implausible and quite unnecessary. You lost the opportunity to slowly heal the hurt that each had caused before maybe a love making "making up" session. The ending was also very weak. Far more could have been done with this story which had the the first four pages as a V. good basis for a cracking read. Shame

that was beautiful ... Thank-you for sharing ... Oh and just wanted to let you know that my mind was creative enough to fix any spelling , grammer or punctation mistakes as I read your story and none where huge enough to distract from the plot of your story... that was beautiful xxx

Many, issues with misused words and several continuity errors. He lifted her from the sofa and carried her straight to the bed, but in the next paragraph she's remembering the day and the bedroom was the last place. An editor would be a good idea. Still loved the story!

A very special story! Thanks Author!

Johnny

I got as far as the end of the 1st page and stopped. I know it’s ‘just’ fiction, but fictional or not there are some things that just rub me wrong and I won’t tolerate it, even in a story. I gave up when “Uncle Jack” moved himself into the Widow’s house despite her telling him, very loudly, NO. I’m sorry but even in fiction some things are just totally unacceptable to me. Asshole idiots who refuse to take “No” for an answer are at the top of that list.

Sweet story.

Though when he ripped the necklace off her neck— that was harsh, uncalled for & would hurt as it snapped.

It didn’t seem like it belonged in there at all.

But over all by far it was a good story.

Thank you for it.

Sweet and good loving story hard to move on sometimes me but people enter your life that change that, nice job,

So a “Do-Gooder” busybody neighbor sends her brother over to the local widow’s house with instructions to move in and “help” her, regardless of what the widow wants? In spite of the fact that said widow told him in no uncertain terms to get out? Yeah right. In my neighborhood “Uncle Jack” wouldn’t have had his suitcase opened all the way before the “widow woman” either sicced her dogs on him, or broke out one of her late husband’s guns and started blasting. I find that whole premise a very questionable way to start a romance.

Should it be a bonus when the author and editors have mastered the use of the words two, to and too? For me, it detracts from the story when you have to stop and think about what the author is trying to say.

Such a touching story and sweet passionate sex. Thank you for sharing your work! I really enjoyed it!

5 stars!

Wow I don't smoke, but I felt I needed a cigarette and an energy drink after reading the love scene!

I have lived in Arizona for 45 years I am trying to think of where the story takes place: in the central Az mountains, Mogollon rim or maybe Cochise co.

Really ? A grieving widow throws herself at a complete stranger after only - how many days were there ? - 2 days ? Come on ! This is highly unlikely !

Too bad actually, the plot has potential, is even quite good, unfortunately developed (much) too quickly, like so many others.

It seems to be quite unique that an author takes the time a story needs !

As I said, too bad actually !