All Comments on 'Random Encounter'

AestheticallyThicc. I like that name. Boy, I can't wait to read many many more chapters of your writing!

Great start! Can’t wait to read more!

Really enjoyed reading this! Would love to read more!

Your have a really good first time, about a first time.

You mentionned that could mention might help you write more comfortably, so I volunteer . . .

Yeah hangovers - Yea, hangovers . Punctuation might improve a story, or kill it.

I don't what to do - know why I picked this out ?

Her meaty trunk for a cock - of a cock

Chock/choke

Despite the little words - few words

These are but a few examples have pulled from the first half of your tale. Suggestions for a more easily read piece, perhaps a more efficiently written piece.

Of utmost importance is Proof Reading. I have seen a suggestion, made by a commentor, to record yourself reading/Proof Reading your piece THEN listen to your recording while reading along. I think this is a very good suggestion, so I offer it to you. Not my original idea, but worthy of application.

You display tremendous potential, not only for this genre, but for more within literotica.com

I hope to read more offerings from you, with submissions come growth.

For a first story I think it was decently good. My only critique is that the main character feels very...monotonous. It feels like it's only the girl talking for the most part and his only real replies other than what he's thinking seem to be things like "Yeah", "No", "Ok" or really short sentences. Like he's not even trying to have a conversation with her. Other than this and a few grammar errors, it was well done but it also felt a little rushed/short. Still looking forward to other stuff you might have planned.

Good start. Would definetly like to read more!

Classic mild vanilla futa with male. I like it. Please continue.