All Comments on 'Raven Walks Ch. 01'

I really loved the beginning of your story. You did an excellent job of setting the stage for the rest. Your use of description painted a vivid picture. I look forward to seeing where this leads. Great job!

They always say that the first few lines of any story would make or break it - you managed to get me hooked in a matter of minutes... I think you're an excellent writer; the words just come alive right off the page! Right now I have no critique for you... I just know that this is a definite favourite for me here on Literotica. Thank you and keep writing!