All Comments on 'Real Estate Power Couple Ch. 02'

Might want to figure out some way to signal the reader in advance when you change from first- to third-person{and versa-vice}

Still no actual sex and it's still too short. Three stars.

Looking great and like how it is evolving

Boring AF

As another commenter stated, I too will point out the abrupt perspective change. Be very careful with this it can take the story off the rails. Devote more time to her perspective versus a short interjection and put a pause in his thoughts. It can be lead to a real mess with the writing errors overpowering the story. So far it's obvious to a certain degree where this is headed. I like that she's not some tramp suddenly got a big wet for her son. The reveal of her sexual side could prove quite fun. Then there is the dangerous and obvious fact they can't keep the ruse up forever if she is to make it big. So far the story is progressing well. Another complained of too short. I think the amuse buche of the opening chapters is perfect. Bring on the next course please.

These small chunks at a time isn’t doing it. Don’t get why you don’t write it in its entirety. **

I like the small chunks. I am interested in seeing how you handle her transition from very conservative to giving it up for her so

Pick up the PACE !

Talk about a slow burn - this is wonderful! I'm thrilled to see where this is going! Keep at it!

Doing chapters is one thing. Not having any actual sex is something else. Either move this thing along or your next "chapter" will be the last I consider reading. You write well. I just prefer more action when reading in this category.

Ok, suspenseful....( kinda like one of those click-bait adds that say the same thing for 20min. only to send you to as sight to buy something ridiculous) but, I'm kinda like the "tease" aspect of it ...

This is how a good story is written. Not to rushed, believable, and realistic. I don't know anybody that would be comfortable with acting like their son's wife or their mother's husband.

You're going great dude. Don't listen to the negative comments. Be yourself.

Please post sooner and longer. Newly earned fan.

Slow burner, but superb read. So many routes to explore with this one, with all that drive time, gotta add in some car fun.

really enjoy the slow burn 5/5

Great continued build up. Write the story you want to write. Because so far its fantastic

Two chapters and still no incest? I'm giving up.

Very much enjoying the slow build up.

The pacing is absolutely perfect..My mom always let her bra straps “accidentally” slip out..such an innocent way to get your son hard…Keep going!

JT

Nice build up. Love the nylons and heels.

Slow and steady. I just hope it wins the race. It looks like the conservative mother is slowly coming out of her shell and starting to develop some feelings that are anything but motherly. Very nice.