by FantasyFisher
Don’t get why you take the time to write the whole thing. Would get a better score from me if you did.
The premise and evolving story line make this a very exciting story. I hope that the continuing evolution is able to retain the tension until it snaps and explodes. *****
This is going to be one of the top stories of all time. Going to hall of fame for sure.
Keep going and don't pay attention to negative comments. Whatever you're doing is clearly working!
Haven't read this level of quality in a while on this platform. Once again please longer and sooner.
I appreciate the writer's attempt to build up to the mom/son incest and not rush the sex part. Unfortunately he's crafted the story into a corner with no wiggle room. Dad, as written, seems like a normal attentive husband to Mom and a regular Dad to MC. Makes it hard to justify or even explain infidelity on Mom's part in the near future. I like to encourage new writers but he really needs to think through his next character moves carefully.
I must say, I don't normally care much for the multi-chapter stories but this one is FAR more believable with an incredible build. And for the one "Anonymous " commentor, I highly disagree that it's "back into a corner", no, this has potential to develop into one of my all time favorites........ Can't wait for Ch. 4 !!!
TOO LONG. Losing interest. Mom is stuck. Does she give in to temptation or remain faithful? Three parts hints that she remains faithful, so, if she gives in now, she is the worst mom ever! Dad is cucked by son?
Slightly rushed ending that concert, the ride home could have laid more ground work for exotic fun. Keep laying those seeds tho on Julie, she will crack and this saga will only get hotter. Superb
I agree with the comment that it is difficult to justify infidelity on mom's part but I don't see it as a showstopper. There could be lots of situations , unexplored temptations and/or essential social situation acts to keep this mom-son/ Husband-wife situation going that ultimately could lead to mutual closeness on physical level. However, creativity needs to be at its best to pull something like that off.
I have read a lot of stories where mom tries to read online about incest and gets tempted by reading people's stories and experiences thinking that there is nothing wrong with it but that is very commonplace.
I am excited to see what FantasyFisher brings to the table.
Keep up the good work !
The best story every. Love the slow build up. Please don’t rush like other stories . Thank you 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
The longer they are together, as wife and husband, on a per occasion basis makes for slow intimacy.
Shortly they will be in a corner, so to speak. Hopefully the submissions will remain more immediate, ie of shorter duration to match the situations.
i dont like where this goes . You bring up the names of that Josh and whatever idiot to often.. I already see NTR, swinging, sharing, cheating with the guys.. so obvious where u wanna go..
i am out! 1/5
5 stars so far. Slow build, reluctance...just do us a favor and don't make her suddenly turn into a cock raving slut. Keep up the reluctance...maybe some voyeuristic views....woulda been awesome if he'd seen a thong poking out at the concert :)
Fantastic story. Great work. Will be checking back for the sequel. I agree with one other poster please just keep it with the mom and son. Other than that 5 stars great build up
Hoping you have more chapters to this story!! Although it’s very slow developing it has held my interest. This can go many directions and I hope you develop many many chapters!!
It’s going very well with so many possibilities. My parents didn’t get along and my mom would often accidentally fall asleep with me after visiting my room to say good night..Like any teenager I had frequent erections..Distinctly remember the first time my erection rubbed against her ass..Keep writing!
JT
"Promise me you won't jerk off to me!" Yeah, way to kill my boner. Seriously this son needs to step the fuck up and slap his cold fish mom. He's the one doing her a massive-ass favour. Bitch needs to get in line.
Starting to get concerned that nothing worthwhile is going to happen. 3/6 chapters down and not so much as a tit-grope. How the hell was this guy even conceived? Feels like she's a complete prude. Yeah, OK, it's her son, but she could enjoy the damn scenario a little bit at least. And what woman in their right mind slaps someone they're with - especially one that's meant to be her husband - for calling their tits gorgeous, especially when they do indeed have gorgeous tits? Pick up the pace damn it!