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by Jimwrites

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
red line

He-you person stories are difficult. Not a good way to tell a story.

There is a level of eroticism here. It seems more of a game, a challenge, the exhibitionism. That might need some work.

You have one thing clear most writers of E/V do not. The line can't be crossed, or it just becomes sex, and not exhibitionism.

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