All Comments on 'Red Notice Ch. 12'

Too short. Previous episodes have been very good at building the tension.....now release some of it with a spanking or two.....you are risking this getting a tad drawwwwnnnnnn out.

Too slow

#1 Still hate that "they" pronoun thing. Misleading plural use - as if "they" had double heads or something ...

#2 Disagree with earlier comment about short chapter 12 without "action". Kelly seems to drift along in her relation with Kam; not really in control of her intentions and desires. This chapter with some emotional zig-and-zags really does transport that kind of mood and decision process very well and marks an important shift in their relationship. Were, hopefully, subsequent fun & games to be included, those would have distracted from the ambivalence and openness for possible alternate paths. Moreover, being short is definitely an advantage - imagine 5 pages of more ambiguity; Would have been too much, wouldn't it?

Tough to follow sometimes due to the grammatical effect of the plural pronouns, especially when set in crowded areas.

I have enjoyed this story, but i feel my interest starting to wane.

I agree that the kelly kam relationship is developing, but frankly i would think the kelly cherry relationship has so much more to offer. I find Kam to be mildly irritating.

I sincerely hope this story is not going to descend into a love story between kelly and kam

Finally the chapters are too short. Ok if ypu are putting out 3 at a time...but one at a time this short is not working

Now we have the prospect of kelly being spanked by kam....somehow its judt not floating my boat.

This story has gone from constant 5 stars to 4 and this chspter gets a 3.

Its becoming tedious.... get on with it.

I am feeling like the pronoun business is way too much. It seems like too much of an inside joke on the straight world. Maybe within the LGBTQ community it is fine, but the non-binary part of the LGBTQ community is way too small to gain any traction in the rest of the "binary" world.

I fear the writer has lost the plot, the story is adrift and the seas are getting rougher......if the lifeboat is not launched soon it will crash into the rocks and that will be the end of it.

I dont really careless about the binary/pronoun stuff, yes its boring and breaks up the natural flow of the writing, but its not a story breaker for me.

As for the short chapters, i agree, lets have some real effort and see if the writer can manage to do 2 pages.

I feel very irritated that what was a great story.....and i do mean great......is dissapearing down the plughole of average.

Sorry to be so harsh, but come on! You are obviously a talented writer, so make this story fantastic.

I personally like the pace of this story, gives the characters more of a real feeling to grow their relationships. Plenty of other fast paced hectic action if others want that instead.

The way the painting the image of the town is done amuses me greatly, for it's all too familiar visiting my family in a small town. Plenty of quiet moments and boredom that could lead to some amusing things being done through boredom or being complacent.

its seems to lack focus. Having the Uni character may be titillating in its own right to you, it does nothing to advance the narrative. Im giving this one more chapter!

wow, i'm so sorry to see all the enbyphobia in your comments section. you're doing marvelous, skringle! i'm still loving the pace, loving the simmering, the tension, the indecision and confusion, the tenderness. your depiction of an ace character is also like, very good? really resonated with me, like, i had to stop and screenshot and share with my good friend "it's me! it's me!" so—thank you. the cishets might not get it, but as a grace lesbian enby i couldn't be more pleased and touched by this story.

Hey this story is really good, i dont mind the pacing at all (which is a personal preference thing) but the transphobic and homophobic commenters (not a personal preference thing, yall are just hateful!) can bite my shiny queer ass. Keep doing u, skringle.