All Comments on 'Reign'

Dreamy. ;)

Better than cats and dogs, hunky guys with suede ties drop from the wet night sky to take control.

I liked it. If you are looking for feedback on writing, I would say dialogue on a new paragraph and break up the larger paragraphs for quicker and easier screen reading. I can read pretty fast but the big paragraphs slowed me down a fair bit.

Well-written and very erotic. I enjoy the way you turn the heat up slowly from a simmer to a boil. I agree with Quickening that it's best to start dialogue in a new paragraph. By all means take us on another adventure.

Very well done! So simmering hot! Loved it and thank you for sharing with us.

Welcome to Literotica, tariail, and thank you for 'kicking off' with this wonderfully hot story! I do hope you will write tons more for us - this was five-star brilliance.

Your writing was luxurious to read. It put the reader right there, hearing the rain, smelling the leather, feeling her emotions as they happened. Look forward to reading more from you.

Thank you all for you comments and feedback. I pay attention to every single suggestion and will definitely handle my dialog differently in the future. I hope to have another story ready soon. -Tariail