All Comments on 'Rekindle Ch. 01'

It need some improvement but your thought is good

the theme is good

if you need help i can help you

though i am no editor

i enjoyed this, but 9 years old is too young for his responses. I've travelled quite a bit outside the U.S., and even in remote villages in Africa, children his age don't have the mental maturity that you've portrayed. Hell, most adults don't have the resolve you're trying to prescribe to the character.

For instance, the ability to overcome pain in an effort to build a shrine to a deity that he believes has helped his happiness is an incredibly introspective and complex process. Children his age just do not have the necessary mental/emotional maturity to accomplish this feat, no matter what culture he comes from. I understand he's supposed to be special, but it's just not believable. 16 or 17, maybe, 25 or 30, for sure, but not 9. Just my two cents.