All Comments on 'Relative Perversions Ch. 01'

Rubbish

We also want more and soon!

Pants to his ankles. No one looking.

Needs some work.

I've yet to read the other chapters, but I'm liking how the mother is getting more into it, the fact they're getting away with it, and how things are progressing.

Five hour journey became 4

Candy changed to Candi .

I thought it was promising.

But cannot see how it was possible. If mum can lean on the front seat then aunt can see into the back seat.

Except for the silly logistics it was written okay and readible.

suddenly he mentions some sort of family tragedy that wasn't mentioned anywhere else in the story.