by Bishopmalcolm08
suddenly he mentions some sort of family tragedy that wasn't mentioned anywhere else in the story.
But cannot see how it was possible. If mum can lean on the front seat then aunt can see into the back seat.
Except for the silly logistics it was written okay and readible.
Five hour journey became 4
Candy changed to Candi .
I thought it was promising.
I've yet to read the other chapters, but I'm liking how the mother is getting more into it, the fact they're getting away with it, and how things are progressing.
Pants to his ankles. No one looking.
Needs some work.