by Freakyus
Lovely writing and can imagine myself in Lauren'a play. Looking forward to the sequel...
Love this story! Very erotic, would love to read more and see Lauren get even bigger and more submissive
This was a great story idea, and you have talent as a writer. Please either use a grammar check program or find an editor. Your use of commas and other punctuation was haphazard, and distracted from an otherwise great story. I gave you 4 stars, but it could have been five.
I found it easy to follow and nothing about the grammar or punctuation distracted me or detracted from the story. It was a hot story and I loved the edging quality especially.
Once you polish it up, it’ll be one of those stories that’ll be memorable!
Love the story. I'm hoping it goes to where she is so addicted she will model in it for the investors or anybody else he chooses. Not trying to write your story but I sure am giving a heavy hint! I love when the spurned husband can use his rage to demean the source of it.
An amazing Portrayal of a modern Marriage fixed ever so perfectly. I definitely appreciate the sense of romance rekindled as well as the balance of power completely Switched And the heavy contrast between the Existing relationship at the beginning of the story and the end.