by AnyaLeigh
Very enjoyable. I hope to hear more from this couple.
I'm thinking of writing something continuing on from this. I'm very open to suggestions on what you might like to see going forward. Am also open to requests for story's you'd like me to write.
It is confusing to the reader when you switch between past and present tense within the same sentence. Also, please be consistent and stay in either third or first person throughout the story. And the characters could be a little more fleshed out. You show promise as a writer, but please either proofread your next story or send it to an editor before submitting.
Well done, this first story was hot and sexy, not drawn out and certainly shows you have the ability to write good stories.
Ideas for the future are in your head, don’t hold back girl, I bet your mind is as dirty as mine. Just keep those fantasies coming and keep the girls cumming.
“Girls rock, without cock”.
Even thought it's very short, I like how this story developed..., as a snapshot of her first time. The innocence both girls projected was fresh and endearing. Not running into sex, just focusing on your main character feelings. Your story felt as if a young woman was sharing her most intimate memories. This is a gem.
I've read them all. And enjoyed them. Even though I'm happy with my guy I think u are a good writer. And I enjoy your stories.
Dick Dee
very sexy. great for reading to people on discord. I heard at least one person unzip their pants.
Well, my pants were unzipped, fingers stroaking my pussy about the halfway mark
Wow! this was a very short, but very hot story, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it with us!
Your profile is totally a blank.,But if I was guessing i'd say you are a female and maybe a lesbian..Your tale is written in way than it sounds like you've been there before..A+..