All Comments on 'Relief Slut'

At least Marlon is better than Stephen. Donna will get used a lot but won't end up as fish food.

If she's on the softball team, and it's baseball season, why isn't Donna practicing or going to games? Pre-season basketball, baseball, volleyball, and no softball all at the same time? Confusing, but it's been a long time since I was in college.

That's about the weirdest love story I've ever read, if it even is a love story. Pretty good I must say as a fantasy. It's clear our slut has fallen for Marlon, but it's not that clear that Marlon has fallen for her. He likes her, sure, but maybe he just likes her in order to use her. I wonder what he wanted to tell her before the put out for the volleyball team?

This was a nice little flash story, but what about the women's sports teams? They need relief too. And I'm sure Marlon would enjoy Rebecca dining at the Y. Don't we all? Think about it.

I loved being the college slut. My first college bf was sharing me by the time of our second date. It started with his roommates and then expanded to many many others, most were black and that really got me. That was over 20 years ago and I still loved to be gangbanged. Xoxoxoxoxo Annette

I'm sorry, but this was a real disappointment. The basic idea was interesting, but you really rushed the development. None of the themes are explored, not even the sex. This feels more like the outline of a story than a story itself, and that's a shame, because I would have loved to read a longer, well-developed version.

I think you can improve it quite easily just by taking your time, describing in more detail what happens, what the characters think and how they deal with change and so on...

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Oh nice. Bit of a free-use type story. Development as a bit rushed though. Virgin to cumdump in a single day and in as many paragraphs.