All Comments on 'Reparation'

I didn't like the title of your story. I couldn't even read one paragraph after reading the title.

Wow, so much for having grown up and matured, much less for being aware of various medical risk. Sometimes ugly ducklings grow up into swans, or so goes the fairy tale. But in reality normally they just grow up into fat used pieces of trash. Good twist in the story.

How was that reparation? How did that make up for the abuse she went through in high school? She didn't come into her own at all. She was so unsure of herself that she let someone who humiliated her put her in the position to be humiliated again. He dominated her and ignored her opinions. He showed her no respect. I found this story crude and unappealing. Sorry.

So is Paige going to grow some balls as well? If "Benny Boy" does show up at her flat, don't make so easy for him next time. Let girldfriend set down some rules before dripping the dew on that pink stalk.

Otherwise, good story.

Don't let the naysayers stop this story. Keep going. I liked it..

i like your story and agree you should continue with these characters. this should not be the end. but, i also think that paige needs to show benjamin a lesson or two. he cant have all the power and be so high handed in this affair. seems he liked her a little as well. enough to ruin his marriage. so there is a lot that can be played out with these characters. i hope you do continue with this story.

Please continue the story, its a good start.

I liked it, and thought it was hot! but uhh..your not going to just leave it like that..are ya?? Please continue. Id like to know if Ben meets her at her flat...and what about his ex wife???

Good luck in the contest!

Hi dear.I loved it a lot.U dnt hv 2 ask coz i alwaz vote for.Though a bit more length wouldnt hv harmed but still i loved it.

Hi dear.I loved it a lot.U dnt hv 2 ask coz i alwaz vote for.Though a bit more length wouldnt hv harmed but still i loved it.

From reading about her high school experiences, I would have wanted Paige to have a more romantic, sensual experience, instead of just an "unfinished business" fuck. Don't get me wrong, I like the hardcore fucking stories, but this one had the build up for more of a romantic payoff.

But somehow I have to give it a 100. I understand Benjamin, although I'm a little uncomfortable admitting it.

Reparation? Something is missing. Perhaps there is more to this story.

I loved it! It was soo hot...please continue the story

...doesn't make up for a tacky beginng and a tacky middle. It just doesn't make it believable.

Never as Planned but in this case it seems too have worked out. I Wonder how Carrie is doing?

Your imagery and dialogue are top drawer. The story line held my interest, was well developed and begs for a sequel. Good luck in the contest.

Creating and giving characters life within a short space of time and letters.. I could actually see the characters in my mind. Keep writing and I will keep reading your stories.. Hopefully, you will be published.. you deserve it.

Continue to keep me on your mailing list. R from NYC

And it seemed like he didn't actually change. You write beautifully dear but your male characters are too damn controlling. Sometimes to the point of being unredeemable.

I think the pacing of your story and the characters you created were very well done. The dialogue you did created a nice tension between the two characters; however I would have liked a little more detail regarding their actual tryst. The build-up was nice, but the ending seem to come on too quickly. Overall, nice job and keep writing.

Ben is a bastard. But at least he knows what he likes. I like the built up of the storybut I hope the author finish it. I do appaud an author when she mades her hero a strong alpha male. I like that in a character and his countpart is strong fiesty female. I hope the author bring out more of bondage theme. I like that it will make the story more interesting.

i felt like your main character couldn't catch a break. i just couldn't find a single redeeming thing about ben to make me feel like he deserved to be with paige. he preaches about self awareness to her (which she definitely needs) but it doesn't seem like it's coming from a place of compassion or attraction. i wanted to knee him in the balls. :) the bossiness during sex would have been super hot, if i could have believed that he really liked her, but as it was, it read more like hot hate sex than reparation. if you do write a second chapter, i hope she gives him HELL.

Didn't like this much - perhaps if it were extended - but after going on about how she didn't know herself, Ben then proceeded to dominate and humiliate her. Ok she was aroused but what a tosser, not a very nice person unlike Paige.

I really liked this story. It was well written and the sex was hot.

This was pretty good, although I noted some annoying mechanical errors that should have been corrected. I thought the buildup was possibly a bit too long, and the characters seemed to be a bit overdone. The sex was pretty hot.

Would to see more ir stories

This story was rushed, cliched and had to many over-the-top situations and reactions happening in such a short amount of time that it didn't even appear to be real...making it extremely hard to read. This is the first story of yours that I've read but couldn't really get through. I'll try some of your others though, hopefully they're a lot better.

This story started out fabulously, like another of your stories, and when the sex scene came along, I stopped reading. As soon as he said, "I am your masturbatory toy" I was done. It was really over the top. I mean, he's an ass to her in high school, and then tries to degrade her after she's made good for herself? I feel like she should have wielded the control a bit, and then given it to him, but this was just..way over the top. You did something similar with Talons too, and over-the-top encounter that made me gag. I hope your next stories will be not so over-the-top because I do like your writing, if not your plots.

Though it was was a quick read you captured the heroine's past and and Benjamin was and is a hot male lead, thanks, enjoyed the story.

Can't wait for chapter 2!

a bit rough round the edges in places, but the exploration of their characters was excellent. And the fuck... but I had a wee problem with the credibility of the ending. Still, a five.

What an interesting story. Slightly disturbing, but also intriguing as hell. The ending begs for a second chapter. Five stars.

I honestly stopped reading because your use of commas was both appalling and distracting. Please read up on the proper uses of commas.

A decent tale, though it could have been a little more in depth. The way Benjamin manhandled her, it was almost like bullying all over again. On the whole it was fairly erotic and a nice way of handling a pretty common fantasy.

Now, in a small aside to anonymous "comma" comentator...take your pretentious, "I'm an english major who has no better prospects than to troll an amateur writing site" butt elsewhere. The use of commas was so distracting you couldn't finish the story? Are you for real?