All Comments on 'Resurgence'

by BrettJ

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Another red hot one Brett

So suicking fucking hot, more and more of this please and soon. Sex maniac Lanc's UK

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
You yadda yadda'd

I like your ideas but it feels like you yadda yadda over too much. The first girl felt like a Checkov's gun, but it never went off. So much felt like it was described as an outline more than a story. The gem is there, but it isn't filled out and detailed.

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