by southensang
Two bedrooms, one bathroom - a small mansion? Where are you from, Munchkin-Land?
Poorly written, idiotic dialog, the pace was just blaah, find a grown-up to edit this for you, please, and re-submit it so it scans properly, it's too jerky to be worth the read
I think I need this explained to me. What is it with the blood, I don't understand that part. I don't think vampires do it that way. Although I do like the way the vampires are in the "Underworld" movies.
The second part is coming soon. I am about halfway through writing now. After that it shoud take about three days for literotica to upload the new story. can't reveal any details
Fantastic beginning. Please continue with this story as this is a great start. I loved reading this story & I hope to read more of it soon.