All Comments on 'Revenge by a Thousand Cuts'

Good stuff, but as you already knew, not a complete story. As a result, I can not give it a full score. I hope you come back later and finish it. Great writing style! 3.5*

I was expecting more.

An excellent piece of writing. 5 stars.

how is it revenge of she doesn't notice?

how is it revenge of she doesn't care?

how is it revenge of she doesn't know it was him?

it isnt btb if the b is fireproof PAST the end of your story

So little cuts add up to large wounds and a Judge in Divorce Court can only make you play to replace certain things that it can be conclusively shown that you damaged or destroyed. I always thought it would be better to "lose" or hide money and as many assests as possible over time rather than books and plants.

He's more patient than I would be.

Interesting concept. They say that those who forget history are doomed to repeat it. For an open story invitation, it would be interesting to see stories entitled "Sherman's March", about a guy named Sherman.

Sherman's love of his life could turn rebellious, seduced by one Robert Edward. Then in the ultimate BTB Sherman could wreak havoc in the life of his spouse, secretly following her on her trip to a seaside resort for a planned first time meet up with her lover, Robert. Will she take the hint and cease hostilities towardsSherman? Will Robert take the hint and surrender his seduction of Sherman's wife? Will Sherman have to take Robert down? It all comes to an end by the seashore!

I don't have an account and I don't have the talent. But it would be interesting to see history repeat itself in Loving Wives. Thanks for listening - TANSTAAFL

Made no sense at all. Maybe you should explain the reason for this change in behaviour pattern?

Dr beulahthemick; One word, pathetic.

Interesting prose style, enjoyed it - and the yarn… and yes, it was a story!

Deep, thank you!

Very weird. What was he accusing her of doing since it wasn't clear? A story of revenge, but why?

What a brilliant story! Definitely one to remember.

It's a beautiful story. Why is the score so low?

AWESOME. Well crafted, unique storyline. thank YOU

Not likely but an interesting take.

Very well written. I realise it was restricted 750 words but would have liked to hear her eventual reaction when he is gone.

A brilliant story done in an impressionistic style. The most of the audience here won't understand or appreciate what you've done. 5

Not a BTB at all. Just a fempov parody of a real BTB, using a ridiculous childish husband. Total nonsense.

This needs a sequel. 750 in almost the exact same form, but from her POV. This is good, but begs just a tiny bit of fleshing out…

I liked it but I think it could use a second 750 word chapter and then a third and so on, because right now it feels somewhat passive-aggressive.

Very good in an Edgar Alan Poe way. It took me two reads to fully appreciate it, as the reason for his revenge was subtly placed within the flow rather than being more separate. Or perhaps I read too fast in LW, not expecting the literary subtlety..

Thank you, 5*

So? Are you going to finish? Half a story, half a score.

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Poetry in prose. A lyrical piece of wordsmanship. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.

Well thought out scenario, but it seemed as much self-inflicted pain as it was revenge.

Very poetic! Nicely capturing the "death by a thousand cuts" theme. Your talent is showing, again. Please write another!

No context

As. Part of a complete story it would get 5* as it stands, incomplete and folorn, only 4*

Totally complete. Adding mundane details of the individuals would lessen this tale.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐!

A really unique take -- almost more a poem than a story, but it very much works.

Love the revenge done so subtly. A 5* project in my opinion. Thanks.

interesting and new. Thanks

Brilliant. As one Anon suggested, another short story from her perspective would be interesting. How she subtly starts losing control over mundane things without explanation, irritation after irritation as it subconsciously and then maybe consciousnessly dawns on her that things started to fall apart on her after she started her affair.

Just a thought

What a gutless wimp. 2*

Wouldn’t just walking away be a lot less demanding of your valuable time? It’s hard to imagine this effort salvaging the troubled breast.

Thanks for sharing.

Very well written. BTB by inconvenience? New but not really rewarding, but very well written

Very clever but wish there was more. Where is the payoff?

Well written ode. Thanks for your writing.

gutless wimp

Well written and well thought out revenge. But where is the payoff? She needs to realize why has her world has crumbled and feel the pain she has caused

Interesting concept for a story. Didn't feel all that successful as a story unto itself.

3, average at best. An interesting passive revenge method but the word limit ultimately hurt the story.

Good start to a well thought out revenge

Wish I would have thought of this.

A great start for something further developed. The only “context” here are the actions of the husband. It’s like walking into a movie at its mid point watching a single critical scene then walking out. We, the audience, have at best an incomplete “frame” for what we think is the picture.

A middle- school boy

screams in the night

This is what he writes

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AMerryman

Was neither here nor there….

Was she having a sexual affair? Or was it an affair with her career?? Not sure…so cant judge the story…hence the low score!

This is great! I really enjoyed the way you structured it and wrapped it up

Very good writing, very sad fantasy of revenge. 5*

OK, total revenge, maybe a bit overboard, maybe not. There's NOTHING in the story about what preceded all this revenge. Without it, I can't decide if it's warranted or not. As such, this's not a story at all. Just words. 1 star. Bob

There’s almost an Edgar Allen Poe quality to it.

5*

Reminded me of Tim O'Brien's "The Things We Carried."

A relationship described by the diminishing value of objects that represent that relationship. Sure, not a typical story, but sometimes you gotta break the rules, like seeking revenge by a thousand cuts.

for 750 word story it definitely meets that. Could not ask for a better BTB story without any details involved to stretch out such a tale.

At least it has some elements of a BTB in it, much better than most of the impotent BTB stories on this site. If you had included physical payback commensurate with the level of emotional pain suffered by the injured party, it would have been a masterpiece. Not necessarily death but an everlasting scar of sorts that would be a daily reminder of her treachery and its cost. As for the lover, he is yours to do with as you see fit but make sure she also suffers for it.

Excellent! Like watching the Polaroid of a soon-to-be-full-scene developing...

Written in poetic fashion! Great approach. Did leave us waiting for the last shoe to fall. Almost suspenseful. In the end, 750 words just teases you. I hope the guy gets what he wishes for.

Needed to see her reaction as she noticed all of his cuts.

Seeking justice is one thing; deliberate meanness is something else. BTB that reduces the cheated-upon party to the level of the cheater (or below) is no win. It’s neither entertaining nor satisfying.

Not bad. Sufficiently weird.

You have reason to doubt whether this meets the definition of a story -- it omits some things most stories include.

Speaking of omissions, you should also ask yourself whether many of your sentences are sentences.

Your 750-word quest has trimmed away elements needed for 'good' writing (and reading).

Psycho MC.

The woman needs to run, not walk, away.

Not a story.

As long as he is enjoying himself!!! I hope while he's playing around, he's looking for a new partner or planning a new life. As this one has gone down the pan....

Great idea for a revenge that will eventually make her loose her mind.

It has a quiet beauty, I love it

Let's hear from her after he decides he's had enough and she comes home from another night of "overtime" to an empty house. When she can't manage the bills and goes to pawn some of her valuables and find they are as worthless as her promises had been.

The writing I like, the premise not so much. Two stars.

Kind of like letting the air out her tires 1000th of a PSI per day. In 10 years she might notice her tires are a little low. No wait, she would have brought new tires by then.

Burn the books, hack up the flowers and pawn the jewlery and leave her already!

I was expecting a short confrontation either between him and her or her and an old friend or family member. Hard to do in 750, I realize but her in tears and misery seems appropriate.

Liked this in theory however this type of action requires a”Her reaction and dismantlement” to be worthy of anything but average praise.

This was just stupid.

Im not a fan of 750 word stories, but this one was one of only a few I consider any good. I didnt rate it because its better than a 4, but not quite a 5. Nice job.

good but needs an ending

I'm with @Prince020402 below. Let's have her side of it. Very interesting compare / contrast left open to create.

I did feel this was well done but I would have liked the longer format. Maybe that's for the wife's side tale examining the affair and the results.

4****. Needed an ending even if it surpassed 750 words.

Author set it up well but never paid it off.

I know it is (only) just a story BUT - One sick prick even to write such dross. The sign of a very weak man.

Revenge is only sweet to the beholder as long as there is anger. After a while, the anger and the need for revenge should also fade. Well-written, but over the top.

or you know you could talk to her or something

What can be this good of a start, and not demand a sequel? I think it might be almost impossible to best this beginning with a resolution equally worthy. So Many Options!

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I would have her come to the startling awareness of what losses have been slowly and methodically happening in her life, have her rush home in grief and regret to plead her case for understanding and forgiveness, and have her car break down just far enough away from their house so that she can see the U-Haul pulling away, but can do nothing to stop it. She tries to run after it, but her right shoe heel fails, causing her to fall at the side of the curb as her necklace breaks and pearls go rolling into the storm drain.

I kind of liked it. Not a story, per se, but a captivating vignette.

Well written.

Thanks for sharing it with us.

Unusual response. Sad that she doesn’t notice. That says it all, doesn’t?

Awesome

The people who need a cookie cutter Lit fix will not appreciate this story. It was superb although I suggest it needs a full telling to build upon the introduction you have given us.

Unique take on revenge. 5 stars.

Omg, speachless

Props for taking a chance with something different.

☆☆☆☆☆ pour encourager les autres

Poetic in prose, yet suffering from the lack of completeness that most 750's suffer. You have done far better than most, but my need for a complete arc means I can only give you 4*.

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I particularly loved this line: Day by day eliminating what is special, magical and turning the mystical mundane.

What a different take on revenge. Good writing, indeed!

Thoroughly enjoyed this very quick read, and awarded all five.

We don't know...

...what wifey did, but she's well rid of a guy who exhibits such juvenile and cowardly behavior.

Underrated. Underappreciated. *****.

Wonderfully written! A follow up piece from her perspective would be great! A thousand nuisances culminating in her realization on what has really happened!

A very original and imaginative way for revenge. Very nice.

well cant say i wasnt warned lol. this would have made a good poem.

Oh so good, not read something like this before, ORIGINAL to say the least.

All I can say is that I loved it.

For people who have an issue with this, I wonder if they also have a problemwith the "burn all of her things".

At least *this* way she had a chance to save her remaining things if she'd just realized what she was losing.

How wrapped up in *her* life must she be if she noticed *nothing*, made no connections to her 'string is bad luck'. Clearly, she's checked out and I can't find much sympathy for her.

Excellent take on revenge. Like others, I would like to know her sins and how he caught on. Maybe a sequel.

WOW Great short story, very well written. 5⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Nope, waste of time, what did she actually do? Do you really expect us to believe she didn't notice any of what he was doing? I'd cheat on his sorry ass too.

Why take your anger out on poor innocent plants. They have feelings too you know.

Everything else is okay but to make plants suffer scalding and bleach et al is just wrong. What did they do to harm you.