All Comments on 'Revenge of the Defrocked Psychologist Ch. 03'

I hope not. I would really like more of this five star effort.

I thoroughly enjoyed your story. Thanks for sharing.

I loved the first 2 parts , was hoping part 3 would have Josie take the family down a few more steps but it appears you gave up & rushed to have the children rule ... Sadly IMHO you came up short just like so many authors on here ....

First two chapters were interesting, all three were well written and well edited. (Note to other authors- good editing is worth a solid point increase in score.) Plot in #3 is not just "jumped the shark," it seems the author chose to jump a whole pod of sharks. One particular weak point in the plot schema- what has been done under hypnosis is irreversable? But, Josie has left post-hypnotic suggestion in her own subconscious to protect herself? Major illogic there, methinks. Thank you for your excellent effort.

This chapter ruined the whole story... not sure why you took it in this dir3ction, but it seemed rushed.

I am glad, unlike some of the anonymous commentary, that you turned the story into one less depraved.

I thought he joined the marines not the army??

Chapter 1, and chapter 2 were absolutely great. Chapter 3 was nothing but a hot mess. Difficult to understand what your intention was, but you completely lost this reader. I’m sure that I, and others would appreciate you giving this chapter a complete, rewrite.

For instance, you could start off the same way on chapter 3, but introduce a twist, where Josie expected, and prepared for the children’s intervention.